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You know I adore you, right?





Just checking.

CybrEm

Your splendiferousness knows no bounds, as per usual.

By the bye, are the critters doing Penzance again? 'Cause someone's a
"Perfect Model of a Modern Major General" and it isn't me. As for the rest
of it, I have a difficult enough time deciding whether a tomato is a fruit or
a vegetable. Let's leave animal and mineral out of it, could we?

Ja,
CybrEm

I just read the other reviews. The ones not mine, therefore not of much importance to my
short attention span. Major buzzkill. (And here I was in a good mood 'cause I'm getting a
poem published. Sure, I'm not getting paid for it, but you can't have everything.)

I don't understand how people can get lost in this. It's more fun than the last mystery I read.
And alot more difficult to figure out whodunnit. I'm engaged, enthralled, and all sorts of words
that are (loosely) synonyms of obsessed.

FYI, my last mystery was a Stephanie Plum novel. So called for the main character, not the author.

And, at the end of ch 23 you put "Dolorously", is that the right word? I missed it the first couple of
times I looked, but something was off. So I kept looking.

Ja,
CybrEm

I just read the last chapter and I'm lost, confused and rapidly losing interest. Everything's so convoluted and bouncing around so much, with such odd breaking points that I'm really losing all desire to stick it out and see what caused the whole disaster, intriguing as it might be....

bamfaholic

I just had to chime in and tell you what I think... I have been reading Nemain's work for over a year and a half. A year and a half!!! I don't know of any other author who has been writing that long and updating with a new chapter EVERY DAY!!! As for CONSTRUCTIVE criticism, she loves it. Anything to improve her craft. So when somebody leaves ciriticism with no suggestions to improve her work and doesn't even have the curteosy to put there name on it, it's kind of hard to take it seriously. Despite that it is easy to understand how that can be upsetting, so Nemain wanted to ask some of her LOYAL readers (and there are LOTS of us) whether we thought your comments had any validity. I say HELL NO. But that's just me.

As for you, Anonomous critic, I'd like to see you do better. With great sentence structure like "They were, however, honest and, oughought, at least somewhat helpful." and the use of double negatives such as "I did not tell you nothing but that your writing was script like." I don't see how you wouldn't be an immediate success!!!

The simple fact is that when Nemain started out her UNIVERSE the characters were very close to the XME versions, but after over 13 FULL LENGTH stories and mamanymany sidflings, the characters have grown, matured, evolved, and changed. That's just natural, especially for a great writer like Nemain. I don't say it enough on AFFN.net because I usually send my praise directly to Nemain, but I felt it was finally time to speak up. Keep up the great work Nemain!!!

In closing, as Benjamin Disraeli said "It is much easier to be critical than to be correct."

Found an interesting looking BB yesterday. Decided to read through the most recents threads before registering. Found an interesting one and came back here to check and, lo and behold, my reviews are indeed gone. Makes me wish I'd saved them so I could post them over there. I'm sorry if you didn't find them sufficiently flattering. They were, however, honest and, I thought, at least somewhat helpful.

I did not tell you nothing but that your writing was script like. I told you that you write excellent dialogue, but you use so little description that I usually can't visualize where your scenes take place, to the point where sometimes it comes off like a script minus the stage direction. I also suggested you might want to find some new euphemisms for your smut scenes, or branch out into more graphic language (might have left that suggestion out come to think of it) or do less sex but w/greater detail and description b/c your smut is fairly predictable and interchangeable and it frequently doesn't seem to add to the story at all. As though you just put it in b/c it's time for a chapter with smut or something.

I did comment that I find your interpretations of the characters to be rather unfamiliar, but that since it's your little AU I probably wouldn't comment on it if I reviewed again. I'm thinking now that it must be your interpretation of teenage immaturity or something...I'm not quite sure. They certainly do all come off as terribly immature and insecure, but that's your style, so fine.

As I said before, you do excellent dialogue. Very witty and polished (pretty sure I used that exact phrase), but your plots are so convoluted and you jump from point to point and character to character in them so frequently and with so little lead in that I frequently find myself wondering if I've missed chapters or sections of chapters. It's a shame, because you do actually put some thought into coming up with a plot and I wish I could figure out and follow what was going on more easily. Smoother transitions and more description of where the action was taking place and how the characters got there in the first place would be a huge help. I would also have liked to see more internal monolgue since your POV doesn't seem to be 3d omniscient, but 3d limited. Getting more into the characters' heads would be nice. Yes I know some people over-use this to the extreme, but some people also under-use it.

For the record, I did actually read significant parts of some of your other fics after the last reviews. Anyway, I thoroughly expect this review to disappear as soon as you read it. Your right and prerogative to ignore reviews for whatever reason you choose and it doesn't bother me in the least. It did, however, bother me to log onto a message board I'd never visited before and find you justifiying deleting my reviews to people who doubtless never readm, nm, never would and didn't care, by essentially claiming they were nothing but flames. I tried hard to point out the positives in your style b/c the stories do have good bones and you do have a grasp of the basics of the language so I thought you might appreciate something other than the standard 'wow this iz so gr8.' You really shouldn't be claiming over there that you want constructive criticism as you obvioiusly don't. Don't worry, I won't bother you with any further feedback - nor will I bother taking this to your board, as I have better things to do with my time than doubtless get ripped apas a s a great big meany flamer. I won't read any more of your fic either, but that's probably irrelevant to you.

You know what, please delete my last review w/impunity and a lot of grouching about my nastiness if it helps. I just looked back at it and it's totally nasty, snarky and out of line. I apologize for my really bad attitude this morning. I still believe my first review was helpful, but you didn't find it such and that's your right. That last one was just an unmitigated bitchfest by someone having a bad morning. My sincere apologies.

I'm not a big enough dork to review my own stories but since Anonymous has chosen to remain just that, I have no other choice but to address them here. stlystly, since you ARE anonymous, me complaining to people I talk to regularly about your first two reviews does nothing to your "good name" since you don't use one or any other identifying marks on here. Secondly, THIS review, your little bitchfest, is HELPFUL! Thank you! THIS is what you should have told me in the first place rather than just "your writing is script like" and other complaints without further suggestion or examples. NOW I have something to take into consideration and work into my fics! THANK YOU! And if you cared to read other reviews, I've left up every other review, including the ones that aren't just praise (such as Idsunki's and Unknown Source, off the top of my head). I felt, if you had cared to actually read the NutBoard instead of apparently skimming it, your review was a complaint. NOT a flame, a complaint. Complaints point out what's wrong without giving advice or opinions. YOur bitchfest, snarkiness and crude tone aside, was a good critical review. THANK YOU again. I have no idea why you choose to remain anonymous other than you either think I'm going to flame you to oblivion, which I wouldn't because that's stupid (and talking to online friends and fellow authors about the previous posting was NOT flaming. I didn't malign your name, I didn't malign your work, and I didn't seek you out to slam you. You remained, as your lack of i.d. indicates, anonymous. They may not have cared what you posted here but you know, it really helped me to talk about it and while you might not have liked it, that just tells me you felt bad for doing it in the first place. Again, you're anonymous. How did that harm your lack of reputation?) or I know you. In either case, for future reference, I won't respond to anonymous reviews because if you can't take the time to give me a name or email addy, I won't take the time to respond other than deleting it.

*reads Anonymous* Damn... Okay, I read the other two reviews they posted too and have to say it kind of sucks you deleted them thatthat's your deal. I do agree this one is actually useful. And I suck extra bad for never posting reviews here. In Nemain's defense, she answers every email I send her about her stories and stuff and she DOES accept constructive criticism. People I know who's emailed it to her or whatever have never been flamed and she always thanks us... (Are you blushing yet, Nemain? LOL). Yeah, more detail would rock but you know, I really never saw these fics as scriptlike at all. I've followed the Foreververse and it's sideflings and everything else since you started writing it and I think the characters have grown past what Evo the cartoon had (which was squat in terms of personality and junk). So, in short, more detail would rock and so long as the smut's still in there somewhere, lol, I'm a happy duck. And anonymous--I read that BB, too. If that's what you consider a flame, you must be supersensitive.

Nice.... Is this the next evolution of kurt's powers?