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PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE update it, or at least send me an e-mail so I know how it ends. PLEASE? PRETTY PLEASE WITH WHIP CREAM COVERED KURT on top (or bottom you know your preference really)???

WoW...*claps insainly* that was one of the best fanfictions i've ever read before in my life!!!! And there has been a LOT of those. You said you were going slow and had too much internal dialogue but that's what good stories are made out of, edge of your seat,frauline! You never knew when they were going to attack! Please update as soon as possible! I really admire you as an author! I really want to know what's going to happen to my poor kurt and the others as well. Bitte und danke schon!
-Kei-chan-

I really hate doing this. However this story is far to convoluted. You don't draw the readers in because you don't have enough character monologues. To build emotion and an interesting story line yes you shouldn't directly say everything. But sometimes you need to state things outright. And shove your characters to resolve some of the mild issues to create bigger ones. This needs a lot of work. You have the right idea, but it needs some minor trimming. Good Luck. This wasn't negative, I liked some of it.

omg, i love it!!! kurt and kitty are my two favorite characters ^-^

I like the story. I hope you update as soon as you cen. I hope woolvereen gets a holed of them.

YES!!! I started reading this story on Fur & Brimstone. Words cannot describe how ecstatic I am that you are now continuing it here! PLEASE KEEP WRITING, I am so hooked on this story!!

Wow. That scen there with the proff getting all hyped up about being out of the loop sorta made him sound like a gossip loving teenage girl... And it still managed to work for his character. Amazing. Gimme your skillz!

Fantastic story. I'd be more verbose with my review but I'm high on Thera-Flu. Really, really good.

I must say, a very weone one fanfic. Trust me, I know how hard they can be (have tried a few myself)! Right now I'm absolutely stuck on what will happen next. The only thing I think you should do from this point is follow each of the characters individually as they wake up, get tested, etc. Maybe you could try and have the four escape when they supposedly try to "breed" Jean and Kurt together. I'm thinking though that you might add another mutant character in here somewhere. Maybe someone Jean "meets" in the breeding area or something. They all eventually escape and take her (I say "her" cause I have an idea for a prospective character that you might like, considering your writing style) back to the Institute with them.

If you would like to hear my idea, go ahead and email me. I'd be more than happy to help, even if my idea isn't appealing to you.

Good Luck!

WOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!