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July 14, 2003 at 12:00 AM
I have no words for how bad this fic is. Setting aside your convient AU-ing of Rogue's powers, while there is some characterization at the beginning, it quickly degenerates into an "any two bodies" fic -- i.e., the names in the story could be replaced with any other names and it wouldn't make a difference. I understand that it's difficult to get voice right, but going from Rogue hiding in Logan's truck to calling him "lover" and letting him fuck her brains out just hours later is insane.
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July 7, 2003 at 12:00 AM
"I want to do you like animals would..."? What can I say? It's a fairly odd story... But you've obviously got skill in the hentai subject...
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June 28, 2003 at 12:00 AM
This was a good story, and written in colourful language, although I think you should do some editing before you post. For instance I noticed that your writing shifts between past and present tense, and although this can be acceptable in some situations, I recommend you choose only one tense. I also had trouble knowing who was speaking, since you did tend to write the dialogues in one paragraph.
Otherwise, the flow of your story was good. Due to some technical errors, I only gave it three stars out of five. I liked it, though. Will you write a sequel?
Otherwise, the flow of your story was good. Due to some technical errors, I only gave it three stars out of five. I liked it, though. Will you write a sequel?
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June 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
In the words of Dr.Evil:
"Riiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiight"
Good job, though, good job!
"Riiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiight"
Good job, though, good job!
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June 23, 2003 at 12:00 AM
looks like logans got a love slave ;)
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June 22, 2003 at 12:00 AM
great more more more more more more more