What a chapter
Great story
Well it was a good ending, could you have Felicia return and try to get back with Peter only to find out about MJ and try to prove she is far more skillful in sex and then have all three come together.
You can have her recruit Spider-Woman to better gather intel within the club without her costume, while using her to look after Spider-Man for her while crime fighting. At the same time she used to be a villain like Emma, so she has that as well. Using the club resources to forge the Marvel Knights is obviously a possibility. Turning around Spider-Man's image through blackmail or business connections would be something Mary Jane would probably do as well.
Hmm...on one hand I liked the gangbang scene, but I think I have mixed feelings about it. I'd like to see Peter's reaction to it, though I believe with the way he's characterized here in this story he'd probably be fine with it since he knows what she does for a living and hasn't objected to any aspect of that yet.
Still, it strikes me as odd how easily they can exchange "I love you's" and then Mary goes off to have a gangbang where she even allows the servants to cum inside her which surpised me very much considering how she had only done that with Flash and Peter beforehand; while the male servants are sterile, MJ doesn't know that, and I think her giving the OK harshly devalues the intimacy between her and Peter both in a emotional and physical sense. I'm leaning toward MJ's actions being because of her getting a bit drunk on wine spiked with an aphrodisiac and having a power trip, but I also think she twists Peter's words to fit her own sexual ends here too.
It would be very easy to say, "Well what should have been expected? She's a prostitute," but I really don't want to just write it off like that since she kind of proved, in my opinion at least, that she can be above that. I think MJ letting strangers come inside her crossed the line.
In conclusion, the writing maintains good quality sex scenes and is structurally-sound grammar-wise, but I have mixed feelings about the plot direction with MJ in the latest chapter and look forward to seeing how Peter reacts to her acts of seemingly uncontrolled lust. Regardless, thank you for writing!
Good chapter and turned out pretty well. Though I was kind of hoping it would've just been Emma Frost and Mary Jane together. But that's fine. It's your story at the end of the day.
Looking forward to see what's planned for Peter in the next chapter.
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So, it was a orgy, very hot. I'm interested how will Peter react if he finds out what MJ and Ema did and also what are they planning for him, good work and update soon.
This was really hot. The sex scene of MJ with her new "servants" was truly amazing along with Emma's competition with MJ. Can't wait for the next chapter and to know what are Mary Jane's plans for Peter ? Also can't wait to see how Peter will react to the gangbang that MJ.
Magnificent....Beat Gangbang Scene ever !!!can't help imagine Marry Jane taking a shower with her new "Servants",one cleaning the Insides of her ass with his dick and other her pussy !!!!is there a chance of X-men being involved as well?