schedule
July 20, 2015 at 12:00 AM
I'm sorry, but I'm confused by what exactly happened in this story. Proofreading for spelling errors and proper spacing would have gone a long way toward making this fic much more enjoyable and understandable. From the shear lack of punctuation, I'm not exactly sure what's going on, perhaps adding some descriptors, quotations, and he said/she said would make it easier to read. This feels like a first draft that you wrote while trying to ignore five people trying to talk to you about stuff that you could care less about. I know that feeling and that's why proofreading is so important. I don't know, I just got lost and confused as to what was actually going on there at the end, maybe I just really misunderstood what you were going for and if that's the case, I apologize.
schedule
May 18, 2014 at 12:00 AM
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