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Awesome consept. I Am loving the story so far keep up the great work

LOVE IT.

I was curious on how you were going to write out the relationship between Peter and MJ. It makes better sense for the two of them to start out in this fashion than enter into a relationship right after the love making. I also like how Aphrodite is noticing something isn't quite right consider the spell she placed on Peter. I'm curious to see how both Peter and Aphrodite will deal with the situation that they will put themselves in both by choice and accidents.

The only real question I have is for all the women Peter knows in the Marvel 616 universe, and I know this is very unlikely, but will Peter and Charlie give it another try? As you wrote, she's still willing to work with Spider-Man but has pretty much lost all trust with Peter Parker. Overall, I am curious to see how it will play out.

X-23 really needs the TLC only Peter can provide.

I've been looking forward to this chapter for quite a while, my friend. You always did some of your best work when Peter and Mary Jane were involved. This was definitely one of your best to date and one of my favorites. You always do a good job of capturing the chemistry between them and throwing in some creative sexual exploits. lol It was somewhat tame here, but I see you really used Peter's strength to it's full potential. lol I'm pretty sure most men would struggle with that kind of act, even if they are well-built. Peter's super strength definitely makes that easier and I think some women may find that extra hot. MJ sure did. lol I also like how you incorporated some of the developments in the comics with Mary Jane starting a club. Do you plan on using that club with future plots? I can see it being a good location to bring some of the women. Maybe there are some special private quarters that Peter could use with MJ and the other women. Plus in a club it would be easier for Aphrodite to keep an eye on Peter and his exploits. lol The comics never really explored Mary Jane the club owner that much. You could definitely do well with this. Mary Jane described the strange attraction and urges she felt around him. Maybe if other women show it as well at the club, that will provide some telling clues.

That bit at the end with Aphrodite was interesting as well. It sounded like she sensed the block that Mephisto put on Peter and MJ. I hope that comes up again at some point. Is it possible that she might clash with Mephisto over this? Or maybe some other mystical force? Well for now, you've set things up nicely with Peter. He and Mary Jane aren't back together, but they're in a position to enjoy other women. lol Black Cat has always shown Peter a good time. I can't wait to read it, but for now you've set the bar pretty high with this chapter. You should be very proud, my friend. Great job! Keep up the excellent work!

MarvelMaster616

Nice to see things going well for Peter for once.

Great chapter and hookup with Mary Jane. I see next chapter will be Black Cat, nice.

Future chapter babes I wouldn't mind seeing Spider-Man hook up with: She-Hulk, Valkyrie, Ms. Marvel, Spider-Woman (Jessica Drew), Black Widow, and Tigra.

Love seeing this story keep going, figures that a goddess of love would know that something was up with Peter's love life not going right especially with MJ after what Mephisto did. As far ladies he could be with MJ and Cat are a given, but if we look back on past and present interactions than the other candidates I can see are:

Silver Sable since it was rumored she has a crush on him before Doc Ock planned to make Earth a crispy ball of death.
Black Widow since she was amnesiac there were stirrings there and frankly I think a guy like Peter can really balance her out.
Ms Marvel, I mean lets face it the comics never took the relationship anywhere, I do hope you at least have her not destroy her hair if she won't appear in her well known uniform.
The lovely Spider-ladies Jessica and Julia, though since this is post SI Julia is already Madame web I assume so that could rule her out.

As far as who I like:

She-Hulk: again I think he could do well with her as acting as a balance and he has enough love to care for both forms no matter what.
Rogue: Because there aren't that many pairing with 616 version and she needs someone who doesn't have a shady past for once.
Emma, because Summers is too screwed up right now and she has gone with out with powerful men and has been burned by them.

I do hope you don't mess with Kitty and Bobby, I mean the guy has just as much struggles in love as Peter and deserves this, and as for X-23 I am hoping you get her and Hellion together cause that was another relationship Marvel screwed over without it ever getting a chance to really take flight and she is still a teen so yeah I don't know about her and Pete.

But those are just my thoughts, your story your rules, Peace!

Awesome update.

Yeah, I agree about Ultimate Spider-Man cartoon. It's not very good. Occasionally amusing, but the action and story/drama (or lack thereof) sucked.

Anyway, once again I appreciate the sticking to continuity. I like the idea of MJ owning a bar, can definitely see her doing something like that given the reasons she has in the story here.

Gonna be interesting to see how/if Aphrodite deals with Mephisto's curse/spell.

Keep up the good work!

Intersting take. like the story so far keep up the great work

Hmm, like the idea of Spider-Man spending a night with someone other than the usual women he's been with. Curious what the Greek Goddess of Love will do for Peter now that he has entered into a deal with her. Also, I like the idea of using Rangiku from BLEACH as the model for the goddess. Can't really see the Goddess of Love in any other fashion, even with all the other women characters in the Marvel Universe so in a way, its a unique twist that I can see working for this story. I hope to see more of this soon.