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Ok. I got a few simpl complaints here: firstly the dialogue, it needs to b more personalized by whom ever is talking, ie, harrys British polite and formal speech is way different from thors casually ancient formal British accent that would be far from the normal English we speak. Captain Americas speech would be polite but his lower class and decades older upbringing should show in his dialogue as well. Tony, natasha, Clint and Bruce should all speak casually as they r known to do, n formal and informal situations. Second complaint is simply that harrys way too often just referred to as 'the 20yo. Raven hair, boy, youth, man, omega, agent, British, foreigner, all could b used Morgan to describe him indirectly as his age. Sorry for ranting those thing just BUGGED me

Starlight,

I absolutely adore your work. I've been obsessed with "Rise of the Drakens" for ages, and just a few hours ago decided to browse the AFF world that wasn't the HP universe, and stumbled across this. I was captivated, and despite having just been looking for something to read while waiting to find out if my fiance was coming home tonight, and being exhausted before I even started, I absolutely couldn't go to sleep until I was caught up. Just like with "Rise," I was enthralled from the first sentence, and I'm eagerly awaiting more! (Don't worry, I'm incredibly patient... I understand how busy RL & writing multiple fics can get, so you shall hear no harping on updating from me :P ) I'm continually impressed by the quality of your work. Everything is well thought out, your plots are all fascinating and intense, but they all make sense. Things don't just happen with absolutely no explanation or logic, which drives me nuts in some of the other fics I read. I've only ever noticed a small handful of typos, and considering the sheer number of chapters of "Rise," that's saying something, because I can be REALLY critical, even if I don't voice it. The fact that you continue to put out such excellent work while simultaneously writing multiple stories for multiple fandoms is impressive, and I'll happily wait as long as it takes between chapters. You should be commended for your skills as a writer and a storyteller.

Keep up the amazing work!

Let me first start off saying that I absolutely love your writing! I think if you come up with original characters you could be published.

That being said it is so frustrating reading your works because you seem a to get sick of them and abandon them even though you promise to finish them. Even if you have every intention of finishing them at some point in your life doesn't count. I read "The Life and Times of Harry James Potter-Malfoy thinking it would be done because it hasn't been updated in years. I would have never read it if ii knew you ddidnt finish the story. I don't think you will finish "Rise of the Darckens."

I realize you do this for fun and don't get paid, but I hope you can see how frustrating it is on the readers part when you start a new story and quit updating one that we love and are wrapped up in. You get mad when people want you to update and are not patient, but I think you should take it as a compliment. They read your writing and so look forward to escaping in your stories. That being said I don't think there is any excuse to be rude to you.

I don't even know if you will read this, but I am sorry for the loss of your grandam.granddad. it sucks and the only thing that truly helps is time.

Now I am begging for you to finish, "Rise of the Drackens", "The Life and Trials...", and "Damaged Bodies..." PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE!!!

This issue to correct my previous review.

It was supposed to say sorry for the loss of your granddad. I don't even know how the other word got in there except for the keyboard thinking for me???? Anyways I am really sorry for your loss.

I loved this chapter. Lots of lovey-doveyness and great suspense at the end. I am enjoying reading Harry and Clint's relationship develop. I would also recommend the Alpha Reeducation Program to the other alphas as well, lol. I am glad to see this chapter posted and I wish you good luck, good health, and happy writing.

Im so happymthat Clint has finally gotten his act together and he and Harry are trying to mend their relationship. Of course, just as Harry is starting to feel safe and happy, shit happens to break him down again. Let's just hope that Clint and the boys can get there to save the day and that both Harry and Sean, as well as their babies, are all ok!

~~ Meechy

I love your stories. Cant wait to see more of this!

i think it would be awesome if they all listen to what harry said vie jarvis and that if clint went to harry's old house and found everything that wasn't destroyed by the bomb like harry's parents wedding rings

Star, I have been reading your fics for over a year now. Never have I had anything I didn't like. You made me ship things I never thought I could ship. You are brilliant and I love you. That said, I am having a very hard time reading this fic and enjoying the ship. I know Harry went through a lot of trauma. I know he has every right to be angry with Clint. I even know I would not blame him for asking Clint to stay out of his life if Clint showed any sign of being untrustworthy or cruel to Harry. Yet, Harry isn't innocent in all of this either. He openly flirts with the other Avengers, almost seemingly to get a rise out of Clint. Maybe that is a misinterpretation. If it is, I apologize. Harry also seems to be ignoring how much Clint is trying to help. I mean, Clint called enforcers on himself. That takes a serious amount of self-reflection to do and a lot of love for someone else to want to make them feel safe away from you. Yet, he asks one question about who Harry might have been with and Harry is set to get angry once more. I can understand Harry feeling stifled by the Avengers and they did need to step back a bit, Clint included. I am really concerned about the relationship to come, however. Clint is really trying, trying to the point of shoving his instincts down at times. Harry seems to start trying until Clint lets his self-control break. I want to be on Harry's side, but each time he gets angry, I feel myself defending Clint. I am scared this relationship will become emotionally abusive against Clint rather than two men trying to make a really bad situation into a good one. I don't want Harry to be forced into loving Clint. I know that is wrong. At the same time, it's not fair for Harry to basically be telling Clint he has to be perfect or he will leave and take the baby with him. This has been the hardest review I ever had to write because I do love you so much. Please, don't hate me for saying this. I hope things between Harry and Clint get better soon.

Loving this story :) can't wait for the next chapter to see how if he manages to get away