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Great story so far! Here are my guesses and suggestion:

Carmilla Black – Scorpion
Melissa Joan Gold – Songbird
Walter Langkowski – Sasquatch
Emil Blonsky – Abomination
Tandy Bowen – Dagger
and Tyrone Johnson – Cloak

I'd like to see Spiderman with Storm (Ororo Monroe), Rogue, and Emma Frost.

Interesting take with the OZ serum. Is it safe to assume that since you introduced Gwen, and given Peter's reaction to her words and body, that she'll end up being involved somehow in all this?

Now, the wild card in all this is Natasha. What is her next action, and what was the proverbial "other side" she thought of turning Peter to?

Also, what of Fury, who was clearly keeping tabs on Peter? How will he react to seeing all these different girls with powers popping up all over the place, and at almost the same time? He's not stupid; there's no way he'd see it as a mere coincidence, especially after Natasha said neither of them believes in coincidence. With Peter and the girls forming their own team, Fury likely isn't take to that well.

A good chapter, Peter explaining his plan and leaving out so much of it all at once. I find it very difficult to believe Peter would slip something into anyone's drink but it still worked. There's always been a cause for suspension of disbelief when Spider-man has a harem. Luckily, I adore this trope.

FYI: Persons of Mass Destruction? I love this term. I have an idea of where I'd like to use it in my own story, but I wanted to make sure you knew I was being inspired by your words.

Your writing is improving. You still suffer from a roundabout and redundant sentence structure.

You may want to try and use simple sentences a bit more often. Peter fucked MJ's ass. Lana gave her mother the finger. The table was in the kitchen.

Keep writing, I, and many others, want to read more.

Chapter 10 review: Well so now all the women got together and all their cards have been placed on the table. (well for the most part) So I do wonder how this team will work out, most likely since Lori is the only adult at the moment any cash they take will most likely she will have to launder for them. Most likely will have to use some kind of 'legitimate' business. Not sure what kind but it would be effective, actually what might be fun for a little arc or a spin-off is a little visit to vegas to launder their cash.

I have to say I don't think I ever saw anyone write a sex scene with holding both girls up like that before, it would be a good use of Peter's strength and his powers to stick to things. I also liked that little thing with Lori as she seems to like 'playing house' with Peter as the 'daddy' for their little group. Plus it also is nice to see Lori teaching the girls how to get better at certain sex acts. I wonder if in the next chapter you'll have something like Gwen and MJ sitting awkwardly not used to anal sex yet.

Also wonder what other little games they'll get into soon, plus what Jessica's living situation will be as well. I also bet there needed to be a major clean up after that orgy, I also wonder when Peter will take time out to take the them out on dates. Most will be easy but something for Lori might be a bit harder as it's not like they can go out in public as a couple.

Great chapter! Definitely worth the wait.

The orgy was great (the bit with Peter holding the girls up was weird, but creative). I liked the bits of character development we got for most of the girls, and Lori's more dominant side was pretty entertaining to see.

Looking forward to seeing Peter learning about MJ's powers, and what happens next.

Keep up the good work!

Loving Spider Bite. Awesome story and I cant wait to see how it turns out. Im also a fan of Agent-G and have been for a few years.

I like it. The whole concept of Peter having a spider venom that not only act as a sort of aphrodisiac but also as a super power drug is unique and very cool.

This is one of the better-written fanfics I've had the pleasure of reading. Not just one of the better adult fanfics, but one of the better fanfics period. I'm curious if you're planning on adding women who haven't made an appearance in the Ultimate Marvel universe. Also, are you going to include every woman that spiderman bites become part of his...well, harem? I kind of imagine that he's going to have some women who are going to be much closer to him, as well as each other (Liz, MJ, Gwen, maybe Jessica), as well as more casual fuck-buddies.

I was kind of wondering where you're going to go with this. If you're going to bring the Kingpin into this story in any meaningful way, then Elektra is an obvious choice. HOWEVER...two options that come to mind; namely Captain Jeanne de Wolfe, and Vanessa Fisk. The possibility of Peter using both or either against Fisk might be interesting, as is the possibility of the kingpin owing his wife's awakening to his nemesis. Plus, I don't think anyone has ever written a story featuring them.

I love the work you put into this.
Everything fits together really well.
Kinda depressing how this is turning out much like the symbiot situation, where that word "responsibility" gets forgotten.
...
Hope he realizes this soon.
Rape-man is already a copyrighted name with his own series.

And I'm feeling anxious about reading onwards; things seem to be going well for Peter Parker.
Until it blows up in his face.

Liked reading this story so far. Please keep up the good work. As for your list of the women to be in Spider-Man's/Peter Parker's harem - I approve of and would really like to see the members of said list as full-time members of his harem. Lastly, I hope that there will be several scenes/chapters where Peter Parker has sex with all of the members of his harem since he has superhuman stamina and all. :) Thanks again.