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schedule September 4, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Sorry I didn't review this earlier didn't know you posted a new chapter. Well that's an interesting backstory to Lori you gave her and you added in a twisted version of Shanna into this as well. I was a bit confussed with the Black Widow part as I thought she was still recovering and it seemed pretty quick how it suddenly went into action like that. I don't remember if you set it up in an earlier chapter or not.

person Anonymous
schedule August 28, 2016 at 12:00 AM

The story so far has been incredible. Your Spider-Man Adult Fanfiction have been the best fanfiction that I have seen yet! Keep up the good work man!

schedule July 26, 2016 at 12:00 AM

Whoo, welcome back. I liked the opening scenes with Mary and her multiple personalities. Peter's biggest mistake thus far is coming back to haunt him, and there might be literally hell to pay in the end. I also liked your expansion of Lori's backstory, particularly in how you set up your takes on Mister Negative and Shanna the She-Devil, and that trick Lori used on Jessica and Lana was quite stimulating. Gonna have to figure out a way to incorporate that into my own stories some time. The confrontation between Natasha and Yelena and how the outcome of that started to deepen Natasha's relationship with Peter? Loved that. Absolutely loved that. And now that she's getting an infusion of his blood . . . she might actually live up to her name. Great job here. Looking forward to more of this story and your others that you've launched more recently.

person Anonymous
schedule June 27, 2016 at 12:00 AM
enjoying the story keep writing
person Troll Police
schedule February 24, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Good story so far with no complaints other than chapter update time increments, it would be really cool if you didnt leave the story hanging a bunch of loose ends. I positively hate it when authors just stop a story at some random spot and never return.
schedule January 25, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Interesting chapter. I'm not sure where this is all eventually going to lead, but I do hope that it's a downer or bittersweet ending, as I'm not really in the mood for that.

Out of curiosity, I don't suppose this might mean that later on Lana will have a fetish for being spanked by her "daddy"? Plus, is there a chance that at least one of the girls could have or develop a preference for anal?
schedule January 23, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Well I think that chapter went well, I didn't expect the scene with officer Wolf but I think it was a nice addition to things. I take it this was to show when Liz used her powers on purpose for the first time as I think the story already showed she had them earlier but I'm a little vague on that. Can't wait to see what happens next in the story as well.
schedule January 21, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Welcome back. First off, I'd like to say that those people do not pay enough attention to U.S. and global politics if they think it's unrealistic for the United States to take over entire countries, much less the entire world. They've already been trying, and when you consider the U.S. in most versions of the Marvel Universe, Ultimate included, has pretty much cornered the market on superhuman augmentations, the only thing stopping it from using superhumans to do exactly that is the good conscience of the heroes and the sheer volatility of the villains.

That aside, the plot is definitely deepening, as Peter's gong to find out sooner or later what's happened with Liz and MJ as a result of him injecting his OZ-laced venom into them too many times and that's going to be a tangle to get through, especially when Janet lets on to him what she's learned about his DNA. The police having a sample of Spider-Man's blood on Elektra's sai and Captain Jeanne DeWolfe being the Kingpin's woman on the inside of the NYPD is likely to complicate things even more, and going to a more personal level of complication . . . I'd like to see how Peter does with being the man in the Bombshells' lives, in both the familial and sexual contexts.

On a more philosophical note, however, I'd say that when it comes to burdens on/to society, the reason they're called such is that society would usually rather not deal with these people but is forced to for various reasons. For example, we have criminals to be rehabilitated or imprisoned for the good of the law-abiding population and disabled individuals who as citizens and persons are still entitled to the same rights and opportunities as everyone else. Then there are individuals in problematic situations that still have at least human rights, if not civil rights, that need to be addressed when deciding how to deal with them, regardless of political popularity. It's a hard needle to thread by any measure.
person DarkAvenger88
schedule January 20, 2016 at 12:00 AM
Next chapter, could yo do a lemon scene with someone other than Lana and Lori?
person SomeGuy300
schedule January 20, 2016 at 12:00 AM
After seeing this again and reading through it, I can say that things are already in motion. The pieces are almost set and the game about to start. OHHHHH MAN you really got me excited for the next one! Since you combine the sex in the story to make sense but also go a deeper level of connection between characters. Hope to see the next one soon!