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for Rise of the Storm

by Trinity

schedule April 19, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Hey. Good start so far. This seems like it could be an interesting story. There's not to much to it so far so there's not much to comment on. Although I think it might be helpful if you made it more clear who was speaking. There's a few lines where it can be hard to tell, especially when there's a lot of people in the room at once. Anyways looking forward to reading more, keep it up.