rate_review Reviews

Excellent chapter DS. A lot more simple fun than some of the previous ones.

This chapter with Tabitha was definitely my favorite to date. I think it's a nice break from some of the melodrama from some of the previous chapters. Tabitha always had the attitude of a dirty girl. Plus in this instance, you connected the events with her first taste of anal with one of the earlier first times you mentioned with Kitty. That was a nice touch because it added some connectivity. And the scene itself was nicely detailed as always, all the way down to the preparations and aftermath. The fact that it ended without anyone being too hurt or emotional also helped. I can definitely see Tabitha and Lance getting down and dirty like this and I commend you for your work on this scene. You've really covered a lot of bases with this story so far. I'm curious as to how much further you'll take it. But if they're anything like this chapter, I'm all for it! Keep up the excellent work, my friend!

Regards,
MarvelMaster616

Great job with chapter 13 I love the acceptance everyone showed Jubilee and you did exactly what I would've done with Tabitha everyone's reactions to her revelation felt genuine and didn't go over the top. It truly feels like you've connected with the characters and I'm really enjoying the way you write this story.

There is hoping your next chapter comes fast on the heels of this one. Not that I can talk I'm still writing chapter 4 of my Transformers prime story and I've been working on it since November of last year. :) But in my defense, I do write very large chapters.

Thanks for the hard work and good luck with the next chapter, and school.

Aysha.

It good to see you writing again DS. Not much to say about this chapter other than well that was an intriquing ending. so Tabby isn't going to tell her actual loss of viriginity but her first time doing anal?

i heartily approve. it's a very fun idea.

Glad to see you back and writing this story again. While it has gotten overly dramatic, it is still among the best written stories in this section that I've seen. It may be overdramatic, but it's still fun to read. You're very good at capturing emotional moments. The way the girls sort of swooned around Jubilee was touching, but I would expect that Tabitha's sexual history is probably a lot worse. She was somewhat of a deviant in the show. So I can only imagine what kind of bad situations she got into. Whatever it may be, I look forward to seeing how you go about it. Thanks again for continuing this story. It is still an enjoyable read and I encourage you to continue. Until next time, take care and best wishes.

MarvelMaster616

I just got around to checking for the update to your story chapters 11 and 12 were both very good. I really enjoy your first-person narrative and the depth of the characters you write. To be honest I wouldn't change anything you have done. However, I do wish you had added X 23 to the mix. By the way, a good name for her would be Eve.

PS I am hoping that the slumber party will devolve into a fem fuck-fest, even if they have to hold Jean Grey down. Well maybe not going that far.

Hey! Good to see an update to this story. It's still really solid and I think making the chapter a little longer help give it a lot more development. I do feel it's a little strange to think of Jubilee being a prostitute but you made the story make sense and progress towards it well. Anyways this story is always worth the wait and I'll be looking forward to more in the future.

Sorry it took me a while to read and review this one. Didn't notice is straight away.

Really well writtne chapter I thought. It took elements on the 616 jubilee and cleverly wove them into the evolution narrative and added the adult bent. Really felt for jubilee here as things just went from shit to worse to worst.

But it at lwast it ended on a hopeful note of her being back at the mansion.

Glad to see you working on this story again. It's been a while and I'm sorry I haven't kept up. But I haven't forgotten about it. This story is still of high quality in the sense that you write it very well and offer a unique perspective from the points of view of the girls or whoever happens to be telling their story. That may not sound like much, but it really does go a long ways. That said, I didn't think this portrayal of Jubilee was very realistic. I like that you worked parts of it into her past as a mall rat. And I know the X-men Evolution cartoon didn't really explore her past or her family that much, but I think you went a bit overboard in making her a teenage prostitute. Just having her sleep with a guy for grades was acceptable and I think that's something a desperate mutant girl could do. But making her a full fledged prostitute was just too OOC. It was still a solid read and I'm glad you're still doing this. I encourage you to keep working on this and other stories. And I hope if you find time you can enjoy my story as well.

Regards,
MarvelMaster616

Chapter 11 is a great lead up to what look to be a great story I'm looking forward to what comes next!

You should consider creating a review reply thread on the forum so you can keep us updated. :)