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Yay! More First times! And I’m learning new synonyms for intermission. Cool.

Feeling sorry for Wanda in this piece. Not an easy thing to hear at all. For Rogue as well especially in this continuity, where she was pretty much raised by Mystique iirc.

From there they had fallen, to spatter her sternum in a Rorshach-test pattern from clavicles to cleavage. Light striking the moisture produced a shimmer that Rogue found rather distracting, since it drew her eye to that area. I loved the description in this line and the dynamic between Rogue and Wanda.

The whole big tits thing was hilarious but, I don’t remember their racks being really that big in Evo. Certainly not compared to the main comics anyway.

As to the revelation at the end. Wow. That will certainly make an interesting story. Though yeah, certainly will canon right out the window I guess.

Well I caught up with this. I don't think its your strongest chapter but that could be because I can't bring myself to care very much about Wanda. But it was quite nice f/f scene. You captured her inexperience and confusion quite well.

I've been reading this off and on for a while, so I wanted to finally leave you a review. It is a very nice story, and don't let anyone get you down about how you portray characters. What a lot of people forget is that fan fiction is AU, and an extension of how each author views characters. I've yet to be disappointed in the fic, and I can NOT wait to see fallout from the fact that Wanda's first time was with Risty...who Rogue would know was Mystique. My favorite char is Rogue, so I'm also dying to see what you'll do for her if she is indeed a virgin. But again, I've really enjoyed this so far, and am eagerly awaiting another chapter. :)

This was a nice chapter. Not the best in the story, but definitely enjoyable. I think you handled the girl/girl scene with Wanda and who I assume is Risty very well. I can definitely see Wanda being a bit flexible with her sexuality. Given her history in X-men Evolution, it makes sense that she wouldn't have an ordinary approach to sex to say the very least. You're good with general depictions and anatomy. And the first-person perspective was a nice touch. Whatever your plans, I hope you continue this story. I'm not sure how many more of these first times you have left to tell, but I look forward to seeing what you have planned. Keep up the great work!

MarvelMaster616

Aysha is beside himself, yes, yes he is; aside from the fact that this was some of the best all time F/F I have ever read and loved all the nuance's of this chapter. From the English accent to the odd English idioms.(sometimes its hard to believe they understand each other.) However one is forced to be curious, yes, yes one is, about a question Aysha posed a while back. Do you remember? Well do you?

Quite nice how you managed to make each character feel very unique (even discounting the accents) and self-consistent.

Hey. It's great to see a new chapter so soon, and I have to agree that this was one of the strongest non sex chapters. I like that you've found ways to keep the stories varied, first with Tabby's anal story and now Wanda's lesbian story which was a bit surprising but could be really interesting. I can't wait to read more and will be looking forward to your next update.

Nice chapter DS, the revelation about Wanda is interesting and yes I am wondering who she slept with. Some nice conversation between the group here. I'm amused how, 'hell no' everyone is about Anal. Given the expanded mean of 'first time', does this mean we can get a story from Rogue? First orgasm maybe?

Just a nitpick: Smeghead was as far a I know invented by Red Dwarf and is a)not scottish and b) not derived from any other word such as 'smegma' which I beleive Rahne was alluding to.

This was a nice update and a nice little twist with Wanda. You've done a good job of switching things up so far so that each chapter doesn't become too similar. Wanda being gay definitely changes things up a great deal. Her sexuality was always somewhat odd in the comics. She has been shown to have tendencies to incest in Ultimate and robots in 616. Her being gay actually makes her seem more realistic. lol So I applaud you for taking her character in a new direction. All the tension between Kitty and Tabitha was well done too. Although I find it odd that Kitty is so hostile when she has Colossus as a boyfriend. And Tabitha's whole outlook on objectifying men the same way men objectify women makes a strange bit of sense in her own crazy way. I'll be interested in seeing some of the reactions to Wanda's story, whatever form that may take. Overall, this was another nicely done chapter. I encourage you to keep up the good work.

MarvelMaster616

This chapter was's short but sweet. As for the anal sex, I think you should of had him take the condom off for that part and when he came inside her she should have described how it felt to the other the girls.

I'll keep an eye out for your next update. I really enjoyed reading this story.

Aysha