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Well just finished chapter 2 and I think I liked the theme you got going here with certain couples ironing out certain things that had happened in the past since some of these things were never really addressed in canon they just kind of buried them. I like the new way you're doing your sex scenes too as they seem a nicer read now and I have to wonder what else will happen.

Although will this be over the course of time or all in one night because even with help there's no way to avoid getting sore from too much sex.

I also thought about Rogue and how she wanted to feel as much as possible now, I can see her wanting to have experience as much as possible. Maybe even a gangbang at some point (although I don't know if there are enough male members, maybe she could slip out into the public baths of the city and find a large group of men for a time of random sex for it)

Well, I think I've mentioned before what a sucker i am for Scott/anyone but Jean or Emma. So Pyslocke really was the highlight of this chapter for me. But Bobby and Lorna was surprisingly enjoyable for a pairing I know nothing about. I'm afraid the same can't be said of Logan. I'm just not a fan. And Tabitha/Roberto I can take and leave. Though comics wise I'd have loved for them to stay together so Marrow's crush on Sam could be further explored but then I read X-Men and not X-force/new mutants/whatever the crap they were called.

I've mentioned this before. Ridged is not something penises are. Rigid means stiff. Ridged means 'has ridges' Unless they're using ribbed condoms or something it doesn't apply.

Looking forward to more. Hope my perennial favourite Rogue will be getting some more loving soon.

I've been reading your work for a while now (dating back to the stuff you have under your former accounts!) so this was a treat to find! As usual, great work! I like your choice of couples, so a next chapter about couple-switching worries me a bit. But you've delivered before, so I'm not too anxious.

Hope to see more!

Phenomenal start. MM616 as ever, manages to take debauchery in the X-Universe to a whole new level. Some intriguing differences from the main continuity, but given the setting, it'll be interesting to see where the story goes from here. A wonderful way to kick things off. Looking forward to the next chapter.

Additionally, I personally don't feel the group sex scene was too fast. Having seen many stories involving these sorts of orgies, it's commonplace that the focus quickly moves from couple to couple, the way it would play out in say, the editing of an adult movie. And there's nothing wrong with that.

Awesome story.
Please continue.

Not a bad idea for a PWP fic. Still a little clunky in places. You detailed the setting and the timeline changes in your author's notes and then proceed to write paragraphs of exposition of the exact same stuff in the fic itself.

And the ritual itself. I get why you used the aphrodisiac and all, but did you really have to have the leaders drug them with out their knowledge and before telling them about the ritual. It's a little well sleazy and affects their ability to give consent.

Still I did enjoy some of the sex; i'd had the same thoughts about Rogue enjoying a position with maximum touching, as well.

Well the start was a little clumsy with the pure exposition instead of actually kind of going through explaining the changes in more detail. I mean how many people were suddenly couples can give some readers backlash from how quickly it happened. I think a little more time in setting the story up would have helped instead of just rushing through the set up just to get to the story.

I was expecting more characters to show up and a few I wasn't sure why they were there to begin with like with Domino as I don't remember her being an X-Men all that much so it was a little odd. Plus only three members of the New Mutants show up and only two of the younger generation just seems a little lopsided.

The sex scenes were okay, a little fast at times which I think it was because you were trying to cover multiple couples, I noticed that when you do that you spend less time on actually detailing out the sex for each couple and instead just to a quick thing on what they're doing. Maybe focus more on less couples to get in more details or just remember to spend more detail on each one might help.

So it was a little shaky start so I do wonder how the rest of this will go.

The story's good, but Laura is way to out of character for my liking. Given her past, there's no way she would just blindly go along with the whole orgy idea. Unless Logan involved her in the planning.