rate_review Reviews

Good story mostly, but the latest chapter felt wrong, they seemed to have been forced into it without their consent.

And I am sick of most long stories eventually devolving into some sort of rape story.

Finally got through Repaying a debt two parter. Yeah, sorry its been a while since I reviewed.

The gangbang was okay. But I've got to agree with a previous reviewer; the more and more you harp on about Emma Frost needing to repay the rest of the team the more and more vindictive and silly it seems. I mean 99.9% of the X-Men have done dodgy stuff/been villians at some point in comics history. Not seeing why Emma deserves such treatment worse than say Gambit and his part in the mutant massacre to pick an example.

The second part. Well you've written that threesome so often. I only skim read it.

Catching up after a while and I just have to say I loved, loved, LOVED chapter 14 part 1. Hottest chapter yet. And I started to think that the story was winding down, but 14 part 2 seems to imply the story might be continuing for a little longer. Glad to hear. Now if we could just get some gangbang action for Kitty, Jubes or Laura. ;)

Well the second part of this with Emma/Jean/Scott I think dealt with a few issues and a lot of things that needed to be said between them and worked out was started. Of course it does make me wonder as Emma did say she was in love with Scott still so makes me wonder how this would work by the end of the story. Kind of reminds me of this scene I saw recently as two women were competing over the same guy when she said "we should work out whose the wife and whose the mistress" that line came to mind reading this and I would like to see something from that.

But still I didn't expect the majority of the chapter to deal with them which was a nice little change of pace and I see that Emma worked out a few details ahead of time. Can't wait to see what happens although wouldn't it still take hours to get from New York area to South America?

AS always you've written a great new chapter. It was really interesting to see another group scene and I like that you had a bit of girl girl in this one since the ceremony seems like a natural place for some of them to experiment. It's also nice that Emma will be able to take a more dominant role in future chapters.I wonder if that's what she'll be like with Scott and Jean or if she'll keep her submissive role for one last experience. Also maybe now that Emma's role is over we might get to see what the Cuckoos were up to. Whatever you have planned I'll be looking forward to it. Great job.

The wank is unbelievable, no pun intended. Cyclops has always been the cheating bastard with history so he should be punished for his sins. But he's the author's Mary Sue so that would be impossible.

for Chapter 14: Well as usual you've put out a really nice chapter, I really enjoyed it and all the little things you put into it as well. I liked how you have the audience getting in some action of their own as well. I was also surprised to see you put in the original X-Men on Jean into this as I thought it would be it's own chapter but I'm not complaining as you got to put that into the story at some point. Too bad Hank wasn't there as it would be been all of the O5 oh well maybe another fic lol. Plus it was nice seeing some of the others coupling up as well.

Anyways given that this was just part 1 I have to wonder what surprises you'll have coming up for part 2.

well with chapter 13 I see that you're trying out some new things like with the sex in mid flight which might be a turn on for those who like high risk stuff. Although I think I liked the Dani/Elixir one the best mainly because of the interaction they had and how you went about it as there was never any real closure between them. She became his legal guardian and when she lost her powers she left and abandoned him all over again. So in this she still is his guardian, i'm surprised you never had something like teaching him about sex in this story at this point as he wouldn't be very experienced. Then again Dani has never been shown with much love interests in the comics for some reason.

while i enjoyed the first couple of scenes taking it slow. I've really got to admit loving the scene with Emma being so sassy despite supposedly being submissive that they have to gag her just to get her to shut up.

Makes me wonder if there's anyone in the team she'll be truly genuinely submissive for? Scott mayhaps?

I really enjoyed this chapter. It really shows your skill how you can take scenes that are very straight forward and "normal" sex and still make them this good. My favorite pairing in this chapter were Bobby and Rogue, I'm not sure why but that one just stands out to me as particularly good. As always great work and I can't wait for more.