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Another smoking hot chapter, MM616! Wonderful to see Rogue in some hot group action and I love that you're playing with that line between who the characters can fuck and who they can't.

Well this certainly was an entertaining chapter and I hope Mystique stays to the end of this chapter and we do see some more family fun with with just the four of them or just the family would make for something since there are a few things you haven't had Mysique do yet such as take the forms of many others or alter her natural blue body as well.I was also wondering how you would have set this up and I think it was done well, having it been Bobby's idea and his help in it I think was a good touch.

Can I throw out an idea? Can Kurt get himself a good spot in a chapter as a tribute to his memory in the comics? He's not only my favorite character but many people loved him as well and I think he deserves it. The idea is Nightcrawler has his moment with Betsy, Domino, and Jean/Amara/Lorna/Storm (One of those four for the last woman anyway. Didn't include Emma because she might be off doing her own thing but then again Kurt was pretty gentle with her GB and maybe she noticed that?) and they are all wearing flowing whit robes like angels (Heh heh get it?) I think it might be a nice little tribute to out favorite elf's memory.

Great new update.The cuckoos were done very well but it might have been interesting to see them all more involved rather then having two of them just watching while one of them was with Scott. Having Emma use her telepathy to be with each of the guys at the same time was really interesting as well. Overall it was all a very good read. I noticed you saved the three X-men with the biggest connections to Mystique for her chapter. Can't wait to see what else you have planned.

Well the new chapter was worth the wait and I liked the use of psychic powers in the Emma scene given if she took every man herself her would be too sore to do anything after it and it kind of reminded me of that scene in X-Men First Class movie as in that film she did something similar. Although I think you use the exclamation mark a little too often sometimes especially in this chapter as I felt you overused it. Plus you were repeating yourself a lot with the 'It was something [person] would wear' maybe have a unique thing for each person. Like "it was something he would have liked to have seen Ororo in once" and "it was something she once wore" just to name a few ways you could have done that without repeating. Plus I felt some of the things were stuff that they hadn't worn and should maybe have been either something the men had fantasized about or it reminded them of someone else.

With the Cockooes I'm surprised given their usually linked minds that they didn't share each other's experiences with the others to enhance the sex so that while they waited they could at least feel the sex one of their sisters was getting, plus more than one of them with Scott at the same time. But overall it wasn't bad and a good intro for them into this story.

Ok, I’m up to date now. Nice to see you getting some use out of Namor’s superpowers. And of course Jaime as one man gang bang is pretty common. Got to say though. When you have take on six women at once it’s like the first chapter. A little too much to follow easily.

Two nitpicks: first. Jean would be Mrs Grey-Summers (married) or Ms Grey-Summers (which can be either married or unmarried) not Miss Grey-Summers (which is definitely for unmarried people)

And a brit pick: ‘Not to bullocks my own psychic abilities,’ bullocks means a young bull. Bollocks is the british slang for balls. And I wouldn’t use that would in that context anyway.

I liked the bit with Namor and Jean there at the start as it makes sense he would go after the woman highest in rank as it were and his dominating way with sex with her as well. I see that Jamie was put to good use with the women there as Emma got a bit of pay back for earlier like you wrote as well was a nice touch. I can't wait to see what else you have Emma plan out for the rest of them and wonder if she'll put the name 'Queen' to good use. Plus I have to wonder what the Cuckooes will do with Scott as well that should be interesting.

I'm still a chapter behind.

namor was an.. interesting choice. I was surprised when after that, they gathered more x-men to the orgy. I was half expecting the other new characters be from the non-x-books as well. like the avengers were going to crash the party or something.

monet's a nice additino though and i'm glad someone managed to obey her long enough to get rewarded, She seemed to hold the bar a bit too high.

Your writing skill continues to be one of the most consistently good on this site. Everything from your description to your characterization to the actual sex is always done perfectly. I really enjoyed this chapter, true it had more coercion then the earlier chapters but I think that just helps keep it fresh and keeps it from getting repetitive. It should be really interesting to see how you use the other new characters as well. As always I'll be looking forward to your next chapter.

Well I really enjoyed the first part with the flashback scene between Emma and Namor as the two really do have some chemistry. Although I'm still confused on the timeline, you start with a flashback from five days ago and then it's an hour after that scene? Or was it supposed to be an hour from the last scene in the previous chapter? Either way it dosen't make much sense especially as you can't fly from New York to Nova Roma in just an hour and set all that stuff up later on. I think it would have made more sense if you said that they left a few hours after the X-Men left that would make more sense as it gives them plenty of time to set up although I guess M and the cockooes would have shielded them all this time?

The last scene was a little odd kind of reminded me of one of your previous stories with a darker take on the X-Men.