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Not lost interest. Definitely still here. :P

I can't agree with MutantMaster, since you've consistent made it clear that Scott is Jean's EX-husband in this fic and that although they're very good friends they're not currently in a relationship. Nothing she does can be considered cheating at this point.

As for the chapter its a decent read and its nice that St. John's consistently a decent sort, though not entirely innocent and perfect. Adds a nice touch of reality.

Jean's poem wasn't awful I thought, but could easily go either way simply on the way it was read aloud. She also seemed to channeling a bit of Wesley Gibson's monologues from 'Wanted' at times.

Writing on your honeymoon... that beyond dedication man.

Decent chapter. Though that's one hell of a plot contrivance. It might have been interesting if he had been the real pyro and in full possession of his memories. No reason why the bad guys can't also be brilliant poets after all...

Well that was an awesome scene. She's supposed to have came fifteen times? just from him fingering her? Either she's really repressed or he's some kind of sex god. Or both.

Still you have a interesting way with words, often using one's that seem a little formal/technical for this kind of prose. Like Neurons or Aperture for example.

Another great chapter. I like how you played on the subtleties between John and Jean. It wasn't too flirtatious, but Jean clearly is aroused. I'm not sure if she's just horny or just craving intimacy. Either way, being a nude beach doesn't help. lol That was pretty funny. She says things that are prude, but inside she's anything but. lol I'm still not sure where you're taking it. I hope at some point she goes back to the institute and channels some of this arousal. lol I don't know where you're taking this. I'm very interested to see what Jean does. Keep up the good work! Whenever you find time to update, I eagerly look forward to it.

Just got around to catch up with this. I like the way it's progressing.

The entire of Pyro not being a madman and instead being a complete gentlemen is quite strange to me though. Though I think I've only seen him in Evolution and a couple of comic issues when he was all legacy viriused up.

An update on this story is always a treat! I'm sorry I haven't reviewed in a while. This story definitely warrants plenty. You continue to explore Jean Grey's predicament in many unique ways. Plus, you finally squeezed in a graphic scene. Granted, it was a flashback, but it was very nicely done. It's not unreasonable to assume that Mastermind took advantage of Jean when he had her under his control. The way he dressed her up, Jean has every right to feel violated. That kind of nightmare probably wears on her and her relationship with Scott. I like how you're working in St. John. He's actually playing a necessary role, giving Jean a friendly voice. After some of the jerks she's come across, she needs it. I'm very interested in seeing what comes of this little stroll. I'm also interested in seeing what happens when Jean talks to Scott again. You've done a great job with this story! I've enjoyed every chapter thus far. Please keep up the excellent work! Until next time, take care and best wishes.

MarvelMaster616

St John Allerdyce? She's going to fall for Pyro?! That's... unexpected.

Wouldn't he recognise her? Her cartoon/jim lee costume isn't exactly a terrific disguise. Oh course he might not let on if he had...

Sorry I didn't review this sooner. Great job on the third chapter! I like what you're doing with Jean Grey, taking her out of the situation of a regular hero and putting her in more realistic settings. In the comics she's never been one to get all dressed up and go out for a night of clubbing. It was interesting to see her step outside her box for a bit and just put herself out there. She just can't seem to find a guy who doesn't project so many lurid thoughts. lol For a while I thought that guy would actually get to her. I'm glad she got out before he had a chance to drug her. I'm not sure where you're going with this, but I like it! Jean Grey is seeing a new part of the world and it's already making her miss the people she cares about. I look forward to seeing where this goes! I also hope she gets a chance to get a little 'action' if you know what I mean. lol Keep up the good work!

Another very sweet chapter. After what happened in the last one, I think it's good for Jean to hear from someone familiar. I see Scott is still protective of her. I'm sure if he was in that club he would have blasted that guy across the Pacific Ocean. It's interesting how Jean clearly wants to be with him, but is trying to make good use of this vacation. How much more is it going to take before she invites him to Australia or goes back to him? Maybe a better question is how many more lurid thoughts can she handle? lol You have a nice grasp of the Cyclops/Jean relationship so far and I look forward to seeing where you go with it. Keep up the great work!

Interesting chapter, though I think you may a gone a tatch over board with the ozzie slang.