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Well I think I liked the X23/Hellion/Exlier scene the best out of this chapter, the other one was okay although I wonder who that girl will do for a male experience as she seems to be the only one without any sexual experience I know what you said about the girls as in no first times but with how you wrote her the only explanation would have been that she did it once and it hadn't been good, but with how you wrote her in that scene it wouldn't make sense if you put that in another chapter.

You know I really do hope you put in a Scott/Betsy chapter at some point, you already said she wished she had still been alive to have a chance at scott again. Maybe you can grant that wish later one. Or maybe it would end up being Betsy challenging Emma to see who the top mutant telepathic babe is on the team using scott as a judge.

Chapter 3

Well although the Jay/Laurie was okay it was a bit of an odd pairing I felt, given she was dating Josh at the time. Although given her powers, would the virus cause her powers to go into overload? I mean if she's horny all the time then everyone else will and the effect on the mansion should increase. Maybe to the point where everyone is fucking.

Although I have to wonder who will star in this movie that the next character will be making, I'm hoping for X23 as I really hope you do something with them together. I also wonder what happened with Bobby/Rogue and if that led to anything somehow. Plus you did leave Gambit in the cell with a horny Mystique whose to say nothing went on after the other two left?

Ha why the hell does Scooter always go for the bitches? lol Great story! Loves the first... can't wait for more... I'd love to see some where Rogue could get around her power somehow... she's always left out poor thing!
Lots of love,
Hollene

Hey great chapter i liked the end of the chapter best.

Hey! Great to see you back with another story! You picked up right where you left off. And I can definitely seen an improvement here. Your style has gotten much cleaner and readable. I really like how you set it up with Beast studying that pheromone again. And already it's taking effect. You took a page right out of the comics and got Mystique and Bobby involved. lol Very nicely done! And a good way to start off the first part. Using Rogue a bit as well was also a nice touch. Gave kind of a movie touch to it as well. It made Remy's reaction all the more priceless!

It sounds like you've got a lot of characters to work with here. But since this is taking place in the more recent comics, I'm sort of disappointed because that means we won't get to see Jean involved. I was hoping to see her hook up with some other characters in this like maybe Colossus, Beast, or even Bobby again. lol That's rough because they never should have killed her off in the comics. Plus, I love how you used her in the last fic so I guess I'll have to make due. Bummer.

Overall, good job. Keep up the great work! And thanks for all your support as well.

Another nice chapter with some interesting pairings! Logan and Armor have not exactly had their moments before, but you definitely worked them over here. lol I like how you set it up with the Danger Room. It sounds like the perfect setting for Logan to get involved with anybody. lol And Armor seemed to hold her own even though Logan's probably more the rough kind of lover. I have to wonder how others will react to him. I'm sure the women will have their hands full. lol

The same could be said for Scott. I loved the bit with the Cuckoos dresses. lol That actually sounds like a realistic conversation for them to have. The Cuckoos were never all that modest. And they've been shown to have a sexy side in recent comics. They really showed it here. lol But the best part was Emma offering her own little touch. lol She's quite the demanding type, which isn't surprising given her history. How Scott handles her I have no idea. lol But overall, great job on the scene!

Keep up the good work! Looking forward to more!

oh okay NOW I know who that person was, the one that goes by Armor. I don't read much X-Men anymore (especially since they got Gambit and Rogue back together even though he's betrayed the X-Men twice to join their greatest enemies and Rogue said she was done with him. Writers really need to read past issues before writing)Anyways their scene was really good and I'm glad you didn't make it seem like the usual stale stuff like in the first one, this was a lot better and the kind of thing that is more fun to read as it's not as predictable.

Anyways I was surprised with the Scott/Emma/Celeste, Mindee and Phoebe although it was fun. But you do know that Emma is the biologial mother of those girls right? And do they know that at this point in the story or are they unaware? Anyways I hope for more of that later on as well. Plus given that they share the same mind, shouldn't they have felt what each other was feeling as well?

I think this is actually a bit better than what you wrote the first time around. It's got more of a set up and the sex scene I think was actually a bit better. Just make sure you don't make the sex seem like something copied from a porno like most of it was in the first one. I have to admit I liked the Bobby/Mystique in this and I hope to see more of it. Maybe if they hook up she won't go bad.

I have no idea who Hisako is though, was hoping for a more mainstream characters in this not the B list. I am wondering what you'll do, I'm hoping for some Julian/X23, loved to see Mercury get some as she can shape her body most likely outside and inside. There is a lot of potential for many different pairings.