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February 18, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hey there, nice story! Glad to see another Toad fan! By crazy coincidence I did this very same plotline in a roleplay recently! Great minds think alike, I guess? Crazy! Get out of my heaaad!!! Heehee.
Just a couple of constructive criticisms: A few spelling errors (who doesn't have those?) and I noticed you changed the characters ages from chapter to chapter (from 28-41 and 14-15). Callie's emotional state (while understandably turbulent) seemed also to flip-flop exceptionally. While I can totally see the Stockholm thing happening (and who wouldn't want to with Toad, mmm? I mean if he tied me up I'd call him Daddy ;-) )but her overwhelming love for him seemed really easy in acquiring. I for one would have liked to see a little more psychological manipulation before she became his willing slave.
But don't get me wrong; I loved it! Great job with Toad, especially, so few people get him right! Keep up the good work! :-)
Just a couple of constructive criticisms: A few spelling errors (who doesn't have those?) and I noticed you changed the characters ages from chapter to chapter (from 28-41 and 14-15). Callie's emotional state (while understandably turbulent) seemed also to flip-flop exceptionally. While I can totally see the Stockholm thing happening (and who wouldn't want to with Toad, mmm? I mean if he tied me up I'd call him Daddy ;-) )but her overwhelming love for him seemed really easy in acquiring. I for one would have liked to see a little more psychological manipulation before she became his willing slave.
But don't get me wrong; I loved it! Great job with Toad, especially, so few people get him right! Keep up the good work! :-)
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February 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
wow what an intersting turn of events, wonder what is going to happen now that the mother in law is in the house!!! can't wait for the next chapter.
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January 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
that was so sad and very unexpected. wow that was some chapter. I feel so bad for the way Toad treats her. Hope to read the next chapter soon. always checking for an update
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January 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
wow very intense chapter, can't wait to read the next chapter
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December 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That is strong... but good. I like Toad and I think that he can be really cruel but inside he is just lonely.
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December 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
this was excellent. i hope there is more. i would laugh if there is a love/trust relationship building as well as if they have a kid
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October 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wow, that was a very intense chapter