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for ++Summer Loving++

by LoLoChan

schedule April 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was wonderfully fun and delightfully plotless. However, you might want to space out your paragraphs a little bit better since they're all squashed together (indenting doesn't do any good with this site, you have to put a blank line between the paragraphs to separate them). Also, who's Kaye? If she's a character from the comics, she should be in the comics section.