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May 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Absolutely love it!!!! Can't wait to see what happens next and i hope everything goes well ;)
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May 15, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ah, glad to hear that you got something out of my little review.
I know the pains of co-ed writing and I really respect those authors that actually make it work... (Like Neil Gaiman and Terry Pratchett in Good Omens.) But know what? This chapter was easy to read XD So now I have to bitch and moan about something else... Damn it.
And the only thing that makes my skin crawl is Scott. While reading this chapter I got this weird need to smack him... It may be because I'm rooting for Todd and really can't picture Kurt with the eye-challenged git. So now I'm hoping that Todd has his second coming and the git hooks up with Jean. Or mirror. Whatever rocks his boat.
And about the bit of little me editing this... The offer is tempting, I must admit. But there are couple of reasons why I can't do it at this point. The first is simply that I really don't trust my English, even though it is my strongest foreign language. The second is about the timing. I can't promise that I'd have time and energy to focus on this while doing my Bachelor's thesis at the same time. But if this little piece of art is still un-edited when I'm done, I'll make sure to give this an another look.
Now I just have to keep waiting for the 'doom of the git', won't I? Maybe in the next chapter? (So no pressures, eh? XP)
Have fun writing!
I know the pains of co-ed writing and I really respect those authors that actually make it work... (Like Neil Gaiman and Terry Pratchett in Good Omens.) But know what? This chapter was easy to read XD So now I have to bitch and moan about something else... Damn it.
And the only thing that makes my skin crawl is Scott. While reading this chapter I got this weird need to smack him... It may be because I'm rooting for Todd and really can't picture Kurt with the eye-challenged git. So now I'm hoping that Todd has his second coming and the git hooks up with Jean. Or mirror. Whatever rocks his boat.
And about the bit of little me editing this... The offer is tempting, I must admit. But there are couple of reasons why I can't do it at this point. The first is simply that I really don't trust my English, even though it is my strongest foreign language. The second is about the timing. I can't promise that I'd have time and energy to focus on this while doing my Bachelor's thesis at the same time. But if this little piece of art is still un-edited when I'm done, I'll make sure to give this an another look.
Now I just have to keep waiting for the 'doom of the git', won't I? Maybe in the next chapter? (So no pressures, eh? XP)
Have fun writing!
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May 14, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Thank you so much!! I really love long chapters XD I hope you don't mind me saying so but I think it is very well written. Although I've missed Todd a little... I really like how you describe his emotions and character
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May 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I had never read a Todd/Kurt fic, bt i'm glad to have read yours; I like it very much and i hope you update very soon
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April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hi! This is just too good to be not reviewed, so may I present your first review for this fic.
I think your plot is very promising and, even though I have seen only the two first movies and read X-men comics about five years ago, you have made the characters very real. You haven't done the same mistake like some in the Potterdom and wrote the whole usiverse and its actions in your fic but luckily you don't either overestimate your readers and leave the characters half-done. That's definitely a very strong aspect in this story.
But I must say that there is one confusing feature in your writing style and that is when the narration changes its point of view. At those points there are kind of narrational flashbacks. It's pretty weird when reading because it really does mess up the chronological order. The narration would be perfect if you could be careful when changing the point of view. I suggest that you could either make someone to read your fic before posting just for picking out those passages or leave the chapter to "rest" and read it through some time later.
But nevertheless you have written thus far a very good fic. And a review just isn't proper without the traditional "please, update" part, so here it is: please don't leave this fic hanging because it really is well made and it has huge potential. But don't stress about updating too quickly, but take your time and polish each chapter so you are happy with it. It would be really annoying for yourself. Trust me, I had to take writing lessons in my university before I stopped handing out half-finished stories... '^_^
Good writing moments, I'll be waiting how this is going to develop. Have a nice spring!
I think your plot is very promising and, even though I have seen only the two first movies and read X-men comics about five years ago, you have made the characters very real. You haven't done the same mistake like some in the Potterdom and wrote the whole usiverse and its actions in your fic but luckily you don't either overestimate your readers and leave the characters half-done. That's definitely a very strong aspect in this story.
But I must say that there is one confusing feature in your writing style and that is when the narration changes its point of view. At those points there are kind of narrational flashbacks. It's pretty weird when reading because it really does mess up the chronological order. The narration would be perfect if you could be careful when changing the point of view. I suggest that you could either make someone to read your fic before posting just for picking out those passages or leave the chapter to "rest" and read it through some time later.
But nevertheless you have written thus far a very good fic. And a review just isn't proper without the traditional "please, update" part, so here it is: please don't leave this fic hanging because it really is well made and it has huge potential. But don't stress about updating too quickly, but take your time and polish each chapter so you are happy with it. It would be really annoying for yourself. Trust me, I had to take writing lessons in my university before I stopped handing out half-finished stories... '^_^
Good writing moments, I'll be waiting how this is going to develop. Have a nice spring!
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April 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love your fic! I can't wait for the next chapter!! :D