rate_review Reviews

sweet yeah suppose your right bout john. its just that Todd's taking a back seat and i hate Remy in this fic. its like a jock snatching a girl from a geek if you know what i mean lol. good chappie

awww what a surprise...keep it up

This was a very good chapter overall. I like that it was Todd-centric and the reveal that they're having twins.

im sorry i haven't reviewed for ages ! been a bit busy with my own writing :) remember when this was a one shot ? i gotta say its blossomed well. I still feel that Marissa sucks but thats just me being narrow minded ;) when we going to have toad as the main sort of focus like in the early chappies ? and can you answer me this, does marrisa love toad, wanda, lance, Remy and john the same or is some just a sexual affection ? oh and also i feel that wanda is mean, but that is pretty accurate anyway so kudos !!!

more fred/angie i crave it ! still can't believe you made that work ^^

lucky me..lol too funny. i like fred and angie as a couple...cant place him tho, who is he? not real familiar with x men comics just the cartoon and movies..keep it up

Heya, been reading off and on despite the lack of the elf and figured it was time to drop a review. Nice work, as usual, writing wise. Interesting character development and interactions, though I'm not all that thrilled about the whole thing revolving around an irresistible OC who has everyone wrapped around her little finger, even if Wanda's powers might partly explain it. I realize, despite her protest in the first chapter that she'd never been a whore (and I realize you've changed/expanded the story since then), that she does consider sex just a commodity and it's not the constant smut that bothers me, it's the fact she's so amazingly awesome at manipulating everyone to get just what she wants from them, even to the point of having Magneto loving and adoring her and adopting her as his new heir. Just as a moderately irrelevant aside, I don't really buy the whole tender Pietro/Rahne relationship either, to be honest. Beyond that the BH characterization seems pretty dang good, even though I have to say I really don't like Lance at all and this depiction of him's a bit too warm and fuzzy for my taste. He's a good *character*, mind you, I just think that from what we saw on the show he was an utter waste of space as a human being - he'd make a good poster boy for future domestic violence offenders of America.

Oh, and at the risk of being reeeeally unpopular with the rest of your readers, I'd honestly be more than happy with a lot less sex in favor of focusing on plot. Though I do realize that a lot of people come to aff for stroke material (*looks up*) that's never my main interest in any story. Sometimes sex is an integral part of an interesting plot but frequently this honestly reads like you're trying to cram as much explicit smut in as possible...and I guess if you really are here just to read and write porn with a little dose of plot on the side then that's totally your call, I just find it a bit off-putting, personally, though your sex scenes are quite well done by and large. Definitely quit apologizing for the lack of smut when you post chapters that don't revolve almost entirely around it; I'd hope given the quality of your writing and characterization that people are reading for the story and not so they can read one-handed. Note I did say hope, of course, and I suppose I'm being presumptuous assuming that that isn't the readership you're aiming for or that you'd value it any less, so apologies if that's the case. Anyway, I'll definitely pop in to finish reading this just because it's so much better written than 99% of what shows up on here, though I'll hope that your next endeavor features Fuzzy prominently again since he doesn't get nearly enough love, especially from good writers. ;) Oh, speaking of which, liked the way you handled the Kurt/Amanda thing as well as your characterization of him at the party...and I suppose I can even see Kitty still hanging pathetically on Lance even after a breakup, as well as being somewhat uptight though not necessarily prudish.

P.S. - Slash, het, whatever, I'm sure you know you don't owe anyone a 'payoff' and if you're gonna be writing sex anyway then it's all good. Looking forward to more fic, this and whatever else you see fit to post in the future. Thanks much for sharing.

I would have preferred to see a Kurt/Kitty scene or a Remy/Rogue scene.

go kurt lol i agree im really into kurt/kitty fics as a matter of fact i love both toad and kurt in fics cause one's got the tail others got the tongue ! the matchmaking their was terrific ! like hitting a flock of birds with one stone ! sweet

yay shes preggers