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I loved this. You took Kurt apart. You fragmented his psyche, and showed just how terrifying a teleporter can be. Eurydice is a fantastic character, you should do more with these characters.

ok first off i loved lost innocence and now you got me hooked this one. i plan on reading all your stories so you can expect more reviews from a father of two who is a witch and knows what you mean by other lifestyles (me and my wife)

ur story is so awesome it made me obbsessed. seriously! i was thinking about it all day when i had to be away from the computer, i just kept wondering what's gonna happen NEXT!!!!!!!!...N-E-Ways if u ever Ever EVER feel like writing more of this plz PLZZZZZZZZZZZZZZzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz...zzzzzz..zzz.z email me and tell me so i can start reading emediatly!!!^^!thanks!

I just read your story, and I have to say that WOW just doesn't do it justice. The interplay of Kurt and Adrienne (named for Adrienne Barbeau, I'm guessing? You did say they watched Swamp Thing.) was very well thought out, and just was well described. I'd love to read more of your work.

I loved this story so much. I have read it just now, and it's amazing. I realy enjoied the end of the second chapter, but the whole srory was great. The ending was good. But I'm realy sad: the story has ended. I hope to read more Nightcrawler fictions from you.

Thank you, it was realy goog.

Heh, so there actually was a bit more internal monologue. For future reference I'm pretty sure that if you do things like that in italics in word there's an upload option these days that'll keep your formatting for you. I probably won't go back and reread the whole thing at this point...though maybe if I end up with lots of time on my hands. The lack of internal reflection was one of the things that bothered me somewhat on the first readthrough and I would be interested in having a deeper look into the characters. Sorry the site did you over like that and I do look forward to whatever else Kurt-centric you might post. Oh, and I don't think most people donactually read the reviews, honestly, so you're probably not getting much viewership for the notes you've made here....:(

I like it. Even Alpha-9. The idea that you can actually FORCE another identity into being is quite interesting. Just the idea of it, is facinating. And the funny thing is, I wouldn't even call it out of character. That's something that I could see him have happen to him. This story started with great potential. Still has it.

you know who else has a creepy song? Enrico Englesias. "You can run, but you cannot escape my love!"

Still reading, still enjoying. Nice to see more introspection, though I find it curious that X apparently has no clue what's going on. Looking forward to the next chapter. Thanks for sharing.

Another nice addition, though I find myself more and more wondering what Kurt's actual thoughts and feelings on the situation are as you don't include much in the way of internal monologue beyond relatively straight forward description. It's very well-written and doesn't stray all the way to being clinical but as a reader I'd personally prefer to see a bit more emotion and depth, regardless of whose POV you're writing from...speaking of which, is it meant to be shifting 3d person limited or is it omniscient and you're just not giving a lot of insight into their inner workings? I could probably go back and read again more closely to figure it out, but it's late and I'm lazy-ish. Definitely hoping to find out more about the program that has him, how he was caught and what's going on with the X-Men while he's there. Oh, and glad you found dict.cc useful, btw.

Anyway, just wanted to let you know I'm still reading and enjoying, hope the critique's at least a bit useful. Thanks for sharing.

~tkd