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May 9, 2007 at 12:00 AM
I see you're letting Jean get a bit more less uptight and I wonder what she'll do with Duncan next, personally I would like to see her work her way up to a few sex scenes with him (yeah he's not my fav guy in the world but it is bound to happen and hey Scott lost his cherry to another woman it's only fair Jean does the same)
And I see Emma is appriciating Scott there although I do wonder if things will get more open between the two but it is still early in their relationship after all.
And I see Emma is appriciating Scott there although I do wonder if things will get more open between the two but it is still early in their relationship after all.
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May 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 5
Oh, my. That was a good end to a date.
The aftermath of it... Not so great. Now Jean is hurt and distraught, and the worst thing is she can't do anything about it.
I'm almost fearing how both talks will go.
Oh, my. That was a good end to a date.
The aftermath of it... Not so great. Now Jean is hurt and distraught, and the worst thing is she can't do anything about it.
I'm almost fearing how both talks will go.
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May 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 6
Ouch. Jean is suffering and poor Scott is clueless. Of course, she can't give him some clue. But it doesn't stop her feelings. I wonder what and how long it'll take until her frustration explodes.
Breakfast in the mansion is a riot. I wonder how Scott canc ope with so many pestering, loud-mouthed teenagers. Nonetheless, I was laughing when he told: "Now you have been debriefed, so shut the Hell up!".
Innnnteresting conversation between Jean and Emma. Pretty arousing, too. It's nice, though, that Emma understands Jean's sexual activity is nobody's business, including her.
Ouch. Jean is suffering and poor Scott is clueless. Of course, she can't give him some clue. But it doesn't stop her feelings. I wonder what and how long it'll take until her frustration explodes.
Breakfast in the mansion is a riot. I wonder how Scott canc ope with so many pestering, loud-mouthed teenagers. Nonetheless, I was laughing when he told: "Now you have been debriefed, so shut the Hell up!".
Innnnteresting conversation between Jean and Emma. Pretty arousing, too. It's nice, though, that Emma understands Jean's sexual activity is nobody's business, including her.
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May 5, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 7
As much for Scott ordering them shutting up... The New Mutants can't stop themselves from getting their noses where they don't belong.
And it's right what Jean doesn't need. Shes trying fixing her own mess, and they don't let her one minute to relax.
And meanwhile, Scott having sex. Life must have some perks, despite all.
As much for Scott ordering them shutting up... The New Mutants can't stop themselves from getting their noses where they don't belong.
And it's right what Jean doesn't need. Shes trying fixing her own mess, and they don't let her one minute to relax.
And meanwhile, Scott having sex. Life must have some perks, despite all.
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May 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
great chapter seems like scott is really getting into it now anyway jean still seems unhappy about them can't wait to see what she gets up to next
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May 2, 2007 at 12:00 AM
chapter 7
Well that certainly was an interesting little chapter, and I can see Emma teaching Scott what she knows, mainly a sex chapter but a good one at least I do wonder what she'll teach him next time and will she also give Jean a bit more pointers? What of the others is there going to be anymore subplots in this?
Well that certainly was an interesting little chapter, and I can see Emma teaching Scott what she knows, mainly a sex chapter but a good one at least I do wonder what she'll teach him next time and will she also give Jean a bit more pointers? What of the others is there going to be anymore subplots in this?
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May 1, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Hey man back again. Not a bad chapter although I think Jean should have been a little more time to get over it all the whole fight and make up in 5 minutes kind of thing might be a bit rare and you used the same type of thing in Untouchable just don't want you falling into the same patterns. I really liked that bit in the kitchen although you should have led up to Tabitha leaving, I know it was in the show but I honestly didn't remember that part until ten minutes after I read it.
Don't supposed with Emma in this maybe have her change a little other things like a Kurt/Tabbitha subplot? I think that could be interesting since I can see tabby and Emma getting along and Emma maybe trying to get Tabby back and using Kurt as way to do it too. Or maybe for a sequel depends on what you want to try, but try to keep from those surprise plots like with Tabitha leaving and that scene with Xavier/Scott in that one story. That's not good story telling and just remember not to jump into things in the future.
The last scene was a surprise I would have thought Jean would be freaked out having another girl do that to her. Maybe have Jean wonder on her own sexuality after that since she should have been disgusted or something but enjoyed it instead. Could be another little interesting side plot in a way as well.
Don't supposed with Emma in this maybe have her change a little other things like a Kurt/Tabbitha subplot? I think that could be interesting since I can see tabby and Emma getting along and Emma maybe trying to get Tabby back and using Kurt as way to do it too. Or maybe for a sequel depends on what you want to try, but try to keep from those surprise plots like with Tabitha leaving and that scene with Xavier/Scott in that one story. That's not good story telling and just remember not to jump into things in the future.
The last scene was a surprise I would have thought Jean would be freaked out having another girl do that to her. Maybe have Jean wonder on her own sexuality after that since she should have been disgusted or something but enjoyed it instead. Could be another little interesting side plot in a way as well.
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April 26, 2007 at 12:00 AM
great chapter i liked the talk scott and jean had at the begining of what she saw can't wait to see how well scott sex lesson goes with emma
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April 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
great chapter man i liked the end bit there i was wondering if jean was going to walk in on them but you had me followed at the end there when she walked in and found that they had been sleeping together keep up the good work.
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April 19, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Well that was a nice update dude, I liked the sex scene with Emma teaching Scott although I think his lessons with Emma have only just began, and I knew Jean wouldn't take this well. She's already confused about her relationship with Scott as it is and now that he's got someone else in his life she'll have to deal with that.