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Very tense moments you put there with Jean and Emma but I'm glad you did it in a way that they weren't yelling at each other and hating each other, your way I think was the most realitic thing that would have happened in a moment like that. I can't wait to see Deadpool next chapter that is always good to see him. I take it with what Scott said Emma and Jean will have a little talk to smooth things out away from the mansion and that's when a certain Merc enters.

great chapter i'm glad jean broke up with duncan they were just wrog for each other anyway can't wait to see what the others think keep up the good work.

You know I think you handled this scene well, it's not always the best for the first time and I think you showed that pretty good. You got both characters off but you also showed their different tastes in sex and how that can complicate things. Normally a couple would talk things out but I guess Duncan isn't the type for that. Although there will still be rumors at school since everyone knew they were going to sleep together and then they break up the next day? Everyone will put two and two together but I think both won't say what happened.

Although I bet Jean could at least tell Emma how things went.

great chapter does jean know what she is really doing? can't wait to see what happens when shaw discovers where Emma is keep up the good work.

I think the hellfire scene really adds a bit of foreshadowing to help pick up the intensity of the story and shows that they weren't just a simple plot device to get the story started. I liked how Emma and Scott talked things out, although the actual sex scene was oddly short given how you usual write it, didn't even mention how they got out of the clothing and stuff. But other then that it was a good chapter, you showed Jean wanted to experience a bit more out of life, plus Kitty is one to talk given who she is seeing lol.

Is it too much to hope for that things between Jean and the jer... uh, I mean jock, Duncan don't go any further than lite petting. I know its selfish, considering Scott and Emma have had a lot of fun together. However, I'm really hoping for an Emma/Scott/Jean thing to start up; after all, she and Jean seem to be getting pretty familiar with each other. At times I wonder if this turn into a Jean/Emma story, with both Scott and Duncan being left out in the cold. However, its obvious both women want him, and he returns those feelings, its just his moral upbringing might not let him go to that point. That being the case, then I think its up to two telepathic mutants femmes to see the error of his ways.
Keep up the great story, I can't wait to see what'll happen next.

hi Slickboy! Really nice story, but keep it coming after chapter 9, I wanna see JOTT! Lovely twist, though...

nice update there although I'm hoping that Scott and Emma will open up I mean after all this time I think they should. Also now I kind of see Scott as a bit of an asshole thinking of another woman while having sex with his girlfriend I know that it wasn't really his fault and all and I'm surprised Jean and Scott even have that mental bond especially that strong since I don't think it was no where near that level in the show at this point. Still I feel like Emma was 'cheated' on in a way and that's kind of not fair given her crappy life.

I do like that Jean and Emma are a bit closer but something like this can easily destroy that relationship as Emma is one that doesn't forgive easy.

I wonder if after this Jean will go all the way with Duncan now, it seems like the next logical step since she's experienced what sex can feel like so maybe she'd want to try it out for real and it's not like she can go up to Scott either that's not her style to go after another girl's especially a friend's boyfriend.

great chapter i thought for minute there scott and emma were going to get seen by everyone had me fooled can't wait to see what happens next between them.

great chapter i liked the end bit with jean she seems to have taken in what emma told her keep up the good work