rate_review Reviews

It's interesting that you mention a thesaurus in this story a few times, considering it's quite obvious that you frequently make use of your own, as there are some odd usage errors throughout this story. As someone who also writes, I understand the need to avoid repetitive use of the same words, but you have to make sure that the alternate word you find actually means what you think it means. The words listed in a thesaurus have *similar* definitions, but they do not all have the *exact same* definition, and are not often completely interchangeable. Subtle differences in meaning become more obvious in context, so be aware that you may need to look up the new word you want to use in the dictionary to make sure it's a good fit before inserting it into your story.

There are some other technical/grammatical errors that perhaps a beta-reader or paying closer attention to spell-check might help you to catch, but none of this hides the fact that you have a gift for story telling, so keep up the good work.

Love your story I think the characters are at an exceptionable OC level. Thanks for writing it I am in despite need of Hank stories and I saw this one. I said hell why not and well I will say this I am liking it.

That was really good! very hot love scenes. keep up the good work.

After reading the first six chapters in one night, I've been struggling to pace myself through the rest. I have a feeling I'll just end up rereading the entirety when I've read the last chapter. Its been intense.

Moments after posting, I gave in and read the rest. So much for pacing. Thank you for the wickedly good stories. I doubt there's a more elaborate, inclusive and satisfying X-men fanfiction out there. Did I mention sexy? I meant to. Sexy.

Holy flurting Kurt, Batman.

XDDD
I hope victor gets better. ;_;

I have to say that although the pairings were unique to me and the multi-partner grouping is not usually something I go in for, I was impressed by this. The humor was genuine, the characters were believeable, and there was nothing trite about it (something I've noticed with several x-fics). I applaude your ability to keep the characters real and as IC as possible. ALSO! I have to say that (although I've seen it a couple of times before) you managed to make Logan a sub character without removing any of his masculinity. again, kudos for that. I was also pleased with your portrayal of Nightcrawler, as he is my favorite fuzzy blue elf. I'm glad that you kept his sense of humor and fun even after the smut. I've noticed a tendency for angst in nightcrawler fics after the smut has been had either because of who he was boffing or because of his religious beliefs. I noticed very little of Kurt's catholicism, but I didn't exactly miss it either. Than you for not making him a whiney bitch. o_o; I plan to keep reading your work though if this is any indicator of what you have to offer, you'll recieve more satisfied reviews from me.
PS: I did notice some minor spelling errors but the grammar and organization is wonderfully intact. Again I thank you for knowing how to form a proper sentence.

My My i love this it's so sad at some points and you really feel for Hank but his love making :D
As I love all four of these characters and would have loved to find a fic involving all four of them some time ago this is like a fantasy of a fantasy come true. Great job keep it up (and reviews tend to help self-esteem anyways) and i'll be readin' more of your work

xiusk (sorry weird name: yes do i care?: no)

P.S you continuously use too when you should be using to and that mistake always ticks me off, try to fix that wouldja?

sdlknvsle. HEY YOU.

I read this before~ and I got bored so I went to re-read a bunch of Kurt fics-- this one too [ meaning it's you, know, good. *REVIEW PART* ]. AND I WENT LIKE HEY IT'S THE PERSON WITH THE STUFF! xD

*articulate*

LOOVEEEE.

Whoa, I don't know why that one made me dizzy. Man, you are damn good at this K. The last two were great, I loved 'em. I just ain't happy that it's over. *tries to pout*

It just dont work. Don't worry, I'll be working on the ideas for my coming chapters the whole time. *Promise*