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May 4, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I loved the story great smut will the right amout of plot to be awsome to read. I love that Alex is scared shitless always looking over his shoulder or out the corner of his eye to see if Logan is going to kill him. I can see Mistique righting a book like that, and would easily be a best seller too. if you ever continue this story line there should be a hell of a baby boom after all this lol.
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May 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
“You really are the best at what you do.” awsome a nod to the classic quote "I'm the best at what I do, but what I do isn't very nice".
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May 3, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh, and one more thing…if Remy ever hurts Rogue, gouge his eyes out and castrate him.” that was awsome. I can see Logan doing that even if she didn't ask him to. Logan always was protective of Rogue like a father or older brother.
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May 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Mystique being bisexual makes sense to me Since he body isn't limited to one gender so why would her sex drive. She must have gone competely nuts after seeing hot pictures of both Jean and Scott. It must be twice as hard for her then everyone else.
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May 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I think Kurt and Amanda will be just fine. Right now they both feel guilty for being attracted to an other person, but once they realize they both did it they will be fine with it.
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May 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I liked that one of the major factors of them agreeing to be in Playboy/Playgirl was so that nobody could call them stiffs anymore lol.
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April 30, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love this idea. It does make sense. Hef does support charities and causes so him being for equel rights for mutant make perfect sense. Hef might even be a mutant. maybe his power is his carisma with the ladies.
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May 23, 2007 at 12:00 AM
A few things:
While I like the pairing of Scott/Jean, pretty much all the time, there are a few things that bug me about what you've written.
The first thing is characterization. Scott, who is so private in the majority of universes that you never even see him hold Jean's hand, is doing the exhibition thing. It just...feels fake and forced for his character to do that.
Second thing I'll address is word choice. While I applaud your attempting to keep your word choice from becoming repetitive, you are trying too hard. And some of the words you choose to use are inappropriate for the circumstance, and detracts from the mood you're trying to create.
Third, I can't prove you're a virgin, but after reading some of this I would definitely suspect it. You don't seem to quite get how the female body works during sex, or anything resembling it. For example, despite what porn would lead us to believe it does take a woman (or girl) time to be Ready for sex. Otherwise it can be painful. I don't care how great a woman's libido is, she's not generally ready to go at a moment's notice. Foreplay is our friend. Women do not have multiple orgasms all, or even Most, of the times they have sex. Guys, even ones who have serious libidos (as your Scott seems to) cannot keep going indefinitely. Your characters have sex with very limited downtime in between sessions, and while it is sometimes possible for guys to go a few times in a few hours, they can't keep that up (no pun intended) forever.
I recommend you put down the porn, put down the thesaurus, and then try again.
While I like the pairing of Scott/Jean, pretty much all the time, there are a few things that bug me about what you've written.
The first thing is characterization. Scott, who is so private in the majority of universes that you never even see him hold Jean's hand, is doing the exhibition thing. It just...feels fake and forced for his character to do that.
Second thing I'll address is word choice. While I applaud your attempting to keep your word choice from becoming repetitive, you are trying too hard. And some of the words you choose to use are inappropriate for the circumstance, and detracts from the mood you're trying to create.
Third, I can't prove you're a virgin, but after reading some of this I would definitely suspect it. You don't seem to quite get how the female body works during sex, or anything resembling it. For example, despite what porn would lead us to believe it does take a woman (or girl) time to be Ready for sex. Otherwise it can be painful. I don't care how great a woman's libido is, she's not generally ready to go at a moment's notice. Foreplay is our friend. Women do not have multiple orgasms all, or even Most, of the times they have sex. Guys, even ones who have serious libidos (as your Scott seems to) cannot keep going indefinitely. Your characters have sex with very limited downtime in between sessions, and while it is sometimes possible for guys to go a few times in a few hours, they can't keep that up (no pun intended) forever.
I recommend you put down the porn, put down the thesaurus, and then try again.
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February 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 15
Rhane is pretty wild, right? I guess it's to be expected from a werewolf. I don't know whetehr pity Jamie or praise him. :)
The second scene was my favorite. Tab and Amara screwing up while they're seeing Scott and Jean making love was very steamy. :)
Rhane is pretty wild, right? I guess it's to be expected from a werewolf. I don't know whetehr pity Jamie or praise him. :)
The second scene was my favorite. Tab and Amara screwing up while they're seeing Scott and Jean making love was very steamy. :)
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February 12, 2007 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 16
Aw, the fic is over! :(
Seriously, though: this epilogue was a nice closing chapter. I was shocked to see Lilandra -how a Playboy bunny, no less!-, touched when I saw Mystique greeting her daughter and laughing when I saw the possible Rogue's New Year resolution.
Your story has been original and very amusing. Not very complex, but obviously it wasn't trying to be depth: simply funny and enticing. I'm sorry not having written my reviews before, but I'll be reviewing your newest fic shortly. :)
Aw, the fic is over! :(
Seriously, though: this epilogue was a nice closing chapter. I was shocked to see Lilandra -how a Playboy bunny, no less!-, touched when I saw Mystique greeting her daughter and laughing when I saw the possible Rogue's New Year resolution.
Your story has been original and very amusing. Not very complex, but obviously it wasn't trying to be depth: simply funny and enticing. I'm sorry not having written my reviews before, but I'll be reviewing your newest fic shortly. :)