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for My Friend, My Lover

by marvelmaster616

person Jotty
schedule December 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
urghhh! Cliffy! eek! Hurry!
person Jenskott
schedule December 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Part Four

I liked the breaking-up scenes. I liked specially how you linked them, making Jean's breaking-up provoked Scott's one. So it didn't seem casual or forceful.

Besides, you handled nicely both. The screaming contest Jean got, the splitting between Scott and Taryn due to the weaknesses in their relationship...

Heh. I can't wait for the next part, with Jean playing the temptress.
person RedPhoenix1821
schedule December 30, 2005 at 12:00 AM
OH MAN! Please don't tell me i have to wait that long for the next chapter! That was so good and it only makes me more anxious for the next chapter!
person TwistedAngel
schedule December 22, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Interesting idea. I'm a Scott/Kitty shipper, but your story intrigues me. Makes you wonder if maybe *that's* why Jean's so uptight. One little criticism, though, just a small one. You have far FAR too many elipses (...) throughout the story. They make it a bit stuttering, and kept pulling my attention away from the story. Other than that, it's wonderful and I can't wait to read more.
person Wen
schedule December 21, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Still a lot of funny part, can't wait to read the continuation.
I don't think Duncan will take the break up well, but for the other thing I think she won't have to ask Scott, he's in the same state, if they are in the same room alone, they will jump on each other lol
And lol, woman aren't fountains, soaked towel seem a little too much she was lucky nobody heard her lol
carry on
JOTT FOREVER
Wen
person Jenskott
schedule December 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Geez, if I don't know better, I'd think you like torturing Jean. ^_^

Poor girl. Do her dumping Duncan and ensnaring Scott, you damned tease! :D
person x00001
schedule December 19, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great chapter man can't wait to see what scott and jea are going to do next
person Agent-G
schedule December 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 3

well that was a nice leadup chatper and solo act for Jean. I do hope you handle the Tayran thing well at least but I guess Jean really can't take it anymore. This should be interesting to see how it goes.
person alrischa
schedule December 18, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Yay! They're finally gonna do it! I can't get enough of smut, post the next chapter soon! :D
person x00001
schedule December 12, 2005 at 12:00 AM
great chapter