rate_review Reviews

I like this story. The concept is pretty interesting and entertaining.

You do need to start putting some serious effort into your paragraph structure, though. It makes it hard for the reader to focus when there are huge walls of text. I think your biggest problem is that you need to start separating speakers. When a new person speaks it's necessary to start a new paragraph.

I honestly think this story would be even better if this small technical error were worked on. I really do enjoy this story, it's just rather hard to read.

Great story! So, how does it end? Does Remy get Logan? How? Don't keep us in suspence for long, please.

Damn. Read both chapters. Just as the story was gettin' real good, it stops...*sighs* please write more? Don't keep me in suspense!

wow this is getting very interesting :D
please update soon!

I really like this so far. I like the interaction between him and Jean. I'm looking forward to finding out what else Remy has in mind for this little game he's playing :) update soon!

great fic! gotta love the awkwardness with logan around remy.....what's he gonna do next?

Fka Firesong? *The* Firesong? Where the heck have ya been? I figured you'd left the fandom! God, it's good to see your name (the old one... you know what i mean, right?) again! Anyway... i can't wait t' see what happens next! Remy can be very persuasive when he wants something, and i think he wants this something bad. :)

Good story. It'd be even better if spelling was checked and also grammar, punctuation, etc.

Then, it'd be a truly awesome story...

**** 1/2

Ooh, I'm liking this so far! I think it would be easier to read if you formatted slightly differently, taking more of the dialogue out of the paragraphs, but the content is great! Hope to see more real soon!