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for Hangover Remedy

by smuttykitty

person draelynn
schedule March 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM
Ya know.... you had some decent character development building here. A little give & take between an established couple... that came through real clear. It built the anticipation for some juicy naughtiness BUT you wimped out at the end! Let the boys have fun! And let us have some voyeuristic fun in the process! I like your style... but... a joke has to have a punchline, CSI has to have a dead body, Star Wars has to have jedis and m/m X-fic has to have some smut! :)