rate_review Reviews

Been away from AFF for quite some time.  Recently came back and headed here.  Love this story, love it keeps going.  

Well that was different kind of reminded me of that one chapter with Jolt's with that villain Joystick was it? Can't remember although I did have to look up Gypsy Moth as I never heard of her before today. Kind of wondering if this will play into the story later or not.

I had an idea for a chapter, how about a slave harem kind of thing, you know them dressed up in silk harem outfits and chains and stuff in a room that looks like it's out of arabian nights kind of thing.

Well it makes sense for Paige who was kind of taking on difference appearances to get lost in them as a coping mechanism and fucking someone that actually knows her and who she knows in her real form wouldn't allow her to escapse as usual.

I was wondering if you had considered doing a forced orgasm torment my victimof choice would be Tigra. I like what you're doing with her, it's more character development than marvel have given her since the early eighties.  So you know, tie her up realy tight, blindfold her maybe earplugs, them make her come several dozen times.  Maybe it's for more information?  Maybe a "cliet" is a little more subtle than usual, it's up to you.

Really enjoying the story so far, keep it up!

I was just thinking about this story this week and here we are with a new update lol, now that's timing. So we got Bonita this time and I liked the back and forth there of her past and the present. The only problem was that she was fully dressed when she arrived in that room and you never wrote her getting out of her costume. I think you forgot that part. Plus there was one spelling error in the line "Because having cu before Rafe" I take it you meant to spell 'cum before'. I was wondering about body modifications the lactation thing I can see being done. Have you thought about using his tech to temporarily turn them into a bimbo version of themselves? You know larger ass, breasts, lips when they wake up? I also forgot to mention back when you said you didn't think Arcade would make a 'day care' if the women got pregnant. Well I never intended for them to keep any offspring, I can see Arcade selling them to couples or worse groups like Hydra or AIM would love to get their hands on possible kids with powers in their genes to create new agents for their organizations. There is a history of that with like X23 and the original Spider-Woman (depending on which past of hers you follow that is)

If you need suggestions:
•Kidnap the jewish mutant Kitty Pryde and give her to a group of neo-nazis on her first day.
•Breed Rahne with dogs/wolfs as punishment for something and sell the litter online after the whelping so she'll never see her puppies again.
•X-23/Laura has a healing factor so go all out with her since she'll heal almost everything. Prolapse her anus and womb, insert hot steel needles into her nipples, put different animals inside her like snakes and leeches, plug her urethra after forcing her to be everyone's toilet for a weekend, force her under a tub of semen until she almost drowns(one of the few ways to kill her) and make her drink it all up, have a doctor operate out her ovaries with her eggs and sell them to the highest bidder or to experiment on while making her regrow them, make a horse rearrange her organs for awhile etc.
•Kidnap Jean Grey and her future/alternate dimension daughter Rachel Summers. Hold a daily game or auction where the winner gets to try to impregnate Jean in front of her daughter. Once she's pregnant the winner/one who managed to do it gets to knock up Rachel as well and gets to decide what will be done with the daughters they're now expecting. Would suggest Mr. Sinister as the father.
•Grab Magik and put her with the other ex-New Mutants.
•Pick up the teenaged Spider-Gwen while she's swinging around on a surprise visit to this dimension and give her to Norman Osborn to do with as he pleases for a few days.
•Take Captain Marvel and Spider-Woman and let everyone do as they want with them. Carol was pregnant once in the comics and Jessica is pregnant right now.
•Force Ms. Marvel into serving the same customer Dust had as her first also only Kamala's body can take more.
•Break Jessica Jones down to the point that she willingly whores herself out.

Could probably come up with a ton more suggestions if I had time.

Loved this Jolt chapter. The fear not paying off was mentioned by Dani some chapters back as being nearly bad as when it does pay off. I loved the LMD painting Jolt, really built up a good suspense based on all of your earlier chapters. I think this story really needed this, if only to seed a level of hope in the girls. Hope is such a weapon to wield against the girls. I like the idea that Arcade approving of this date because he felt it was time to build up Jolt again that she didn't have enough left to tear back down. I still go back to the first chapter where Arcade said "When I’ve shuffled off this mortal coil, I want people to say ‘Boy, I’m glad that twisted mother fucker is gone’.” This chapter reaffirms there is an end in sight. Of course, pairing that with Wrecker saying to Namorita "Is Namor somehow gonna change time so my little guy was never in your sweet pussy? Huh? Is he?" You form why this story is infinitely engaging to me.

Ah, you decided to use my idea. And in a way I didn't expect. Kudos.

Three years??, HELL, almost four years since I've read&/reviewed here, and only a few chps? Well, thats fair, as you got your first review from anyone back in 2004, my first one was in `05, and this is only now my 5th posting, to make it 61 in total??? We're all letting you down, dude.
Now, instead, "Doc Shoc" might be their best chance to get a word out. What Hydroman pulled on Tigra was spot ON! Nice adjustments overall, we can see how you're banging out chps and fixing the logic on the fly, as it were. It works, mostly.
Now, for some bad, Because you need it!
Please, PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE!!! get a fucking -beta, please! Typos left and right, and some big enough to gag on! And concept-wise? Chp 15, bottom half. Can't you count???? Boomerang(1), Eel(2), Trapster(3), Chemistro(4), Blizzard(5). ` “Funny you should say that,” Hood smiled. With a snap of his fingers and a burst of light, the room was illuminated, and what the four saw shocked them.` F O U R ??
As I said it before, I'm just a little sick for liking this fiction (and having rubbed another one out over the last handful of chps), but also remember WHY there are the gaps that exist in my postings. Please, for all the Lords of Hades, Get A BETA!!

Well I didn't expect another chapter so soon, I guess you really got some inspiration which is nice, the only real complaint I got is that you never showed any sex in this chapter you cut away before which I felt was a major tease and I hate that. Also why is it that Arcade seems to only focus on Tigra? All the times he's been with a woman in this fic it's only been her. I would like to see him with someone else, maybe Namorita since she hasn't been used all that much in this story. Maybe something like he likes to pick one woman at random for the day as he uses her as his 'personal assistant'.