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by chancejubileefan

person tierrafox
schedule November 23, 2005 at 12:00 AM

This could have been a good story! It truly could have! However the type-os and mispellings and grammar are TERRIBLE!!! I might change the rating if the mistakes got fixed, but the way it stands currently, just barely 2 stars!!!
person shinyquarter
schedule April 7, 2004 at 12:00 AM
love the pairing, the plot isn't eit either. My one bone to pick is this phrase: "taking about half of him into her clit." It is physically impossible for that to happen. I suggest you rewrite that part. keep writing!
schedule December 30, 2003 at 12:00 AM
OMG!! I havn't read tsincsince it was taken off of FF.net! You were one of my favorite writers over there! Why did it take you so long to find this place??
person Gathering Magic
schedule December 19, 2003 at 12:00 AM
Great story! I am a HUGE fan of Juilee and Hank and i think it is a real shame there isn't much of them paired together on the internet! About time the big bouncing blue beast got some lov Gre Great job!